Title: Bad Behavior Author: Aaliyah Ali Genre: Drama & Mystery. Favorite Food: Everything but mushrooms and pork. Instagram: Liyah.Episode - My story don’t suck, but you can follow me on instagram
here’s mine! thanks for taking the time to review!
Title: Mystery on Hanging Hill Lane Author Name: Marshmallow O. Genre: Thriller, Mystery, Romance
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Why would someone be interested in reading it?: Because we don’t see many thriller stories on the app. Most stories are based around the romance genre, and I wanted to change it up so I wrote a mystery/thriller story. It also has some elements of romance in it and some elements of comedy. There’s full cc for the mc and the love interests, advanced directing, point system, and choices matter!
Instagram: I don’t have one! Favorite food: Honestly anything, but like, seafood.
I’m also really basic and am a pizza stan so…
Title: Blurred Lines Author: Ellie Description: After an intense breakup, Quinn enters the world of no-strings-attached dating. But, what happens when it turns out there are strings after all, and she’s completely tangled in them? Cover:
Cover: Simple. Clear. Not technically impressive, but I, personally, would click on it. Big Cover: Vague. Weird. I like it. Description: Lures me in completely. Title: Uniquely named- even if you remove the pre-title “Adventurous” from the Adventurous Contest, which is good.
Backgrounds/Overlays: Good choices. Fit the story. Animations/Directing: Simple, smooth, beautiful. Sound: None so far. Not even ambience. Some people like that; but, personally, I need some white noise. Spelling and Punctuation: Spelling is good, but missing a some punctuation here and there. Mostly commas. Dialogue Boxes: Always in the right spots. Some people just can’t get it right
Progression of Time: Makes sense. No 2 weeks before --> *1 day after --> 6 years later here
Pros:
• The plot is pretty interesting. I love Leyla. She’s weird as hell
• Literally everything that comes from Norah’s (what I named the MC) mouth
• All of the scripting/coding is impeccable. I have no idea how you do it.
• I already said this, but the spot directing is really good.
Cons:
• Not really a con per say, just a thing I have to say: Episode 1 ended kind of strangely. Like, if I didn’t have unlimited passes, I probably wouldn’t have gone to the next Episode because I couldn’t tell if something interesting would happen in it. It just kind of ended on an off-note is all I’m saying.
• The way some of the characters talk about how they’re able to be so happy and perfect all the time seems weird considering that they can’t even really understand what not being like that is like. I think Norah/Norah’s dad is the only one who should be even making comments about their situation since she’s the “special” one. Unless, of course, they’re just trained to talk about how perfect their lives are all the time.
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TL;DR:Project Humanity has interested me greatly; and after reading what’s there so far, I am eagerly awaiting new content.
Thx for this thread could you please Review my story Here is my story :
Title : Breaking my psycho’s walls Style : INK Genre : Adventure (Bit of comedy ) Author : Neserin.creating Chapters : 6 ( more coming soon!)
Description : Ayden Walters known as a psycho, is out of jail!! And goes undercover to catch a killer in a High School , what will Happen? Will he find the killer bevore he keep killing people? find out Adventure, Comedy, murders, and more…
Wow, really? That’s not what I expected but it’s great to hear something new!
Well, they get taught about it at school, that’s why I showed the History class. They know that there are things that they can’t feel, but they think it’s better this way.
That’s why I added CC, so people can decide theirselves how the MC should look and to give the chance of making the story more diverse. And there’ll be friends/love interest who represent different cultures or religions.
I’m already writing episode 4!
Thanks again for taking the time to review my story! Would it be okay if I ask you some extra questions via pm?
Cover: Pretty text. Pretty background. Art style throws me off a little, but it’s unique Big Cover: V cute Description: Enticing. Just a miscapitalisation case. Or maybe it was supposed to be like that 🤷 Title: Easily searchable but non-distinguishable from other stories with the same name.
Backgrounds/Overlays: I really like the customs you made/uploaded. V beautiful. Animations/Directing: Very, very smooth. Incredible work. I only saw a couple of mistakes.
Lucas floating on top of his bed
Ryan and Rachel with a black/missing background(s) in episode 2
Sound: Fits theme. Spelling and Punctuation: Satisfactory. Both of us love run- ons A couple of spelling mistake and tense mess ups- but other than that, nothing. Dialogue Boxes: The pink theme was a good choice. Dialogue boxes were where they were supposed to be.
Progression of Time/Scene Changes Between Main Characters: Kind of weird because your directing is so good and smooth, but I understand it.
Pros:
• Each one of the main character’s storylines is interesting and I’m curious as to where they’re going
• Very good scripting
• You worked really hard on set dressing, and it really shows
• Use of readerMessage for character relationships
• The choice to punch, kick, and slap Tina
Cons:
• A’s mom is just RUDE
• I know we have to thank our beautiful background and overlay makers for their amazing stuff, but you have a LOT of people to thank and it kinda clutters up the screen
• Tina is a crazy bitch
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Cover: 10/10 I actually really like it Big Cover: Same as small cover and still beautiful. Description: Cliche. I wouldn’t have clicked further on the story if you didn’t have “choices matter” added in. It reminds me of the Pretty Little Liars story and I barley got through that. Title: Unique. Couldn’t mistake it for anything else.
Backgrounds/Overlays: I love your overlays/custom backgrounds so far. They add a lot to the story. Animations/Directing: Smooth & Clear. Technically impressive. Next level. Sound: Works. Spelling and Punctuation: Perfect?! How is that even possible?!!! Dialogue Boxes: Well placed.
Progression of Time: Perfect. I know when things are happening and when they are happening.
Pros:
• Holy. Fckng. Sh*t. There are so many background characters. And they’re so well placed. Kudos!
• Birth giver & sperm provider
• Seems like choices really DO matter.
• Menu at the beginning of a new episode reminds me of a rpg menu
• You put a lot of work in, and it really shows Cons:
• A lot of the characters look the same. A lot of the girls have the same eyes/noses. Same with the guys. Without customising them, of course.
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TL;DR: Alluring diegesis and beautiful execution. I want to see this one through 'till the end.
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could you please Review my story 
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I actually really like it
