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Breaking my psycho’s walls by @Nency_episode

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3 1/2 Episodes Read

Cover: Interesting… I like the V-Line you put on him :joy:
Big Cover: reads: “Cute but Psycho” :joy: I don’t know how to feel
Description: Grammar is not great. But… a psycho going into a high school to catch a killer? That’s wild :crazy_face:
Title: I like long titles because I’m weird but this one isn’t properly capitalised and you’re missing an apostrophe. It is unique, though.

Backgrounds/Overlays: :relieved:
Animations/Directing: Wonky. Sometimes characters are turned the wrong way or they come on the screen for .05 seconds or when they hug they’ll both have the same animation so they’re hugging nothing. But generally, the directing is okay.
Sound: Works.
Spelling and Punctuation: Bad. Worse. But I can read it, which is good. I’m guessing your first language isn’t English. Which is cool because English sucks. I mean, it’s cool. But like, it sucks? Know what I mean?

EDIT: I wrote that while reading the first episode, before you said you weren’t native English :joy:

Also is “Cherif” supposed to be “Sheriff” or is Cherif his actual name?
Dialogue Boxes: Decent.

Progression of Time: Works.

Pros:
• Ayden is wild :joy:
• You used a lot of spoken voice sounds, and they really had me rolling
• Ayden thinking about helping Lavera for 10 minutes straight after she falls :joy:

Cons:
• Ayden is wild :joy:
• Too much random high school drama. To be fair, most things that are happening are happening at a high school, but, the plot isn’t about high school.
• You use the word “psycho” a lot, which really gives it less meaning (personally). Ayden doesn’t seem psychotic, just slightly emotionally unstable. I feel like if he was he real psycho, HE would be the serial killer, you know?
• Okay, I know Ayden has a electronic ankle bracelet whatever on, but… why doesn’t he just run through the pain? I’m not entirely convinced he can’t escape.

:white_check_mark: CC
:white_check_mark: Simple Directing
:x: Advanced Directing
Diversity Scale:
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:white_check_mark: Outfits Are Cute
:white_check_mark: Custom Backgrounds/Overlays
:white_check_mark: Uses Sound

:x:Limelight
:white_check_mark:Ink
:x:Classic

QUestioNS i HAVe 4 U:
• How old are these characters supposed to be?
• Why does Lavera care so much about a “psycho” getting let out of jail that she doesn’t even know?
• What country is this supposed to take place in?
• Why is Cherif so sure Ayden can catch the killer? And why did he take TWO YEARS (or one, I forgot how much) OFF OF HIS SENTENCE?!
• Um… why does Ayden’s brother and sister act more like they’re in a relationship than siblings? :joy:

TL;DR: Interesting concept… I have so many questions :joy:

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