Ahh! Thanks so much for this! I really appreciate it!
Girlll, it took two failed stories to get to this point
Iām glad you like him!!
Why?
Aww, thanks so much!
Thanks again for this!!
Ahh! Thanks so much for this! I really appreciate it!
Girlll, it took two failed stories to get to this point
Iām glad you like him!!
Why?
Aww, thanks so much!
Thanks again for this!!
Girl, she brought the pedo back to the house
Oh yeah
Is there anything else I can improve on or work on regardless of the music?
Mmm
Nothing in particular that I remember. I think I just enjoyed what was going on so much that I stopped looking for errors my bad
Aww, no worries! Iām just glad that you enjoyed it!
Hey there.
I am curious what you might think about my story since I am open up to revamp a few parts if necessary
Well, I tried to make a story this is kinda non-cliche. You are playing a female and a male MC here and both of them are really sassy and a bit badass as well. The story is about cohesion, familyās love and deep friendships. Itās not like the typical featured episode stories you might see on the shelf. However, even when it starts with the introduction - I have my own way to do everything
Favorite Foodā¦ Food is life so I am sorry but itās hard for me to decide
My details:
My Story:
Author: May Laugh
Title: Trouble Twins
Instagram: maylaugh_episode
Genre: Adventure
Episodes: 8 (going on)
Style: Ink
Description:
Danger. Passion. Love.
Always standing up for each other through thick and thin, that is what these twins are all about. But can they really master every chaos together?
Link: [http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5334870588784640 ]
Small Cover:
Large COVER:
I would love a review from you!
Author: Madhu
Story Title: Black hearts golden desires
Genre: fanatsy
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5019562149478400
Instagram: @episode.angelindisguise
The Star Necklace by @Maya6
Cover: Wonky.
Big Cover: Less Wonky.
Description: Verb tensing is terrible. But I still want to click?
Title: Unique.
Backgrounds/Overlays: I hate them and I love them. Know what I mean? Like, they make no sense, but they make sense? My sentences must be confusing for someone whose third language is English
Animations/Directing: Works.
Sound: Makes me want to dance.
Spelling and Punctuation: Not the best, not the worst. I can understand it just fine and honestly thatās good enough for me.
Dialogue Boxes: Seems legit.
Progression of Time: Decent? I mean, it works.
Pros:
ā¢ Very nice and warranted disclaimer
ā¢ The baby overlay
ā¢ The weird splashes of culture notes. Learning about other people in other places is fun.
ā¢ Little kids actually look like little kids
Cons:
ā¢ Grandma. She knows sheās a woman, right?
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Advanced Directing
Diversity Scale:
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Outfits Are Cute
Custom Backgrounds/ Overlays
Uses Sound
Limelight
Ink
Classic
TL;DR: Itās so weird that I want to keep going.
Thanks for the thread!
Title : Take My Heart
Episode Author : Jiya
Genre : Romance
Style : Ink
Link : http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4602924031868928
Description : Shawn visits NY to get away from his childhood love. But what happens when he meets an ordinary girl? Will she help him unite with his love or show him what real love is?
Cover :
Episodes : 1 (more to come)
Breaking my psychoās walls by @Nency_episode
3 1/2 Episodes Read
Cover: Interestingā¦ I like the V-Line you put on him
Big Cover: reads: āCute but Psychoā I donāt know how to feel
Description: Grammar is not great. Butā¦ a psycho going into a high school to catch a killer? Thatās wild
Title: I like long titles because Iām weird but this one isnāt properly capitalised and youāre missing an apostrophe. It is unique, though.
Backgrounds/Overlays:
Animations/Directing: Wonky. Sometimes characters are turned the wrong way or they come on the screen for .05 seconds or when they hug theyāll both have the same animation so theyāre hugging nothing. But generally, the directing is okay.
Sound: Works.
Spelling and Punctuation: Bad. Worse. But I can read it, which is good. Iām guessing your first language isnāt English. Which is cool because English sucks. I mean, itās cool. But like, it sucks? Know what I mean?
EDIT: I wrote that while reading the first episode, before you said you werenāt native English
Also is āCherifā supposed to be āSheriffā or is Cherif his actual name?
Dialogue Boxes: Decent.
Progression of Time: Works.
Pros:
ā¢ Ayden is wild
ā¢ You used a lot of spoken voice sounds, and they really had me rolling
ā¢ Ayden thinking about helping Lavera for 10 minutes straight after she falls
Cons:
ā¢ Ayden is wild
ā¢ Too much random high school drama. To be fair, most things that are happening are happening at a high school, but, the plot isnāt about high school.
ā¢ You use the word āpsychoā a lot, which really gives it less meaning (personally). Ayden doesnāt seem psychotic, just slightly emotionally unstable. I feel like if he was he real psycho, HE would be the serial killer, you know?
ā¢ Okay, I know Ayden has a electronic ankle bracelet whatever on, butā¦ why doesnāt he just run through the pain? Iām not entirely convinced he canāt escape.
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Advanced Directing
Diversity Scale:
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Limelight
Ink
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QUestioNS i HAVe 4 U:
ā¢ How old are these characters supposed to be?
ā¢ Why does Lavera care so much about a āpsychoā getting let out of jail that she doesnāt even know?
ā¢ What country is this supposed to take place in?
ā¢ Why is Cherif so sure Ayden can catch the killer? And why did he take TWO YEARS (or one, I forgot how much) OFF OF HIS SENTENCE?!
ā¢ Umā¦ why does Aydenās brother and sister act more like theyāre in a relationship than siblings?
TL;DR: Interesting conceptā¦ I have so many questions
Tribe of Malapinchi by @JannahJackson
1 Episode Read (I could tell it was one of those things Iād have to wait to be completely done to finish reading or else Iād get mad )
Cover: Simple. Pretty. Mysterious. Alluring. Yes, I want to click on you.
Big Cover: Almost the same as the small cover but justā¦ not as good. I donāt like how the sun and the moon are joined in the middle. It just doesnāt make any sense. This is a weird nitpik, but why can I see the whole moon and only half of the sun
Description: Tells me enough that Iām interested but not enough that I can guess the ending. And Iām very good at guessing endings. Perfect.
Title: Unique. Exotic? Well, exotic for me. Where I live, people usually say KĀ©lan instead of tribe. Off-topic, but fun fact.
Also, random question: Why is there a copyright symbol in the title? To scare off people who like to steal stuff?
Backgrounds/Overlays: Detailed. Make sense.
Animations/Directing: Excellent.
Sound: Works. Sometimes it randomly stops but thatās probably just me taking 4000 hours to read one sentence.
Spelling and Punctuation: Works.
Dialogue Boxes: Works.
Progression of Time: Works.
Pros:
ā¢ Umā¦ you ask us if weāre hearing impaired right at the beginning so I love you? I mean, Iām not, but people usually donāt think of these things. Very neat.
ā¢ Umā¦ again I am delighted with all the choices presented to me before the story even starts where you put a scene selection in?! I knew I was easily impressed but wow
ā¢ When you use readerMessage, you donāt cover up the screen with random stuff
ā¢ I donāt know why I did it, but I chose to use my profile avatar and it was great
ā¢ Rudo said I looked pale even though I was black
Cons:
ā¢ The characters think too much. And yes, I know that sounds crazy.
ā¢ For .05 seconds you tricked me into believing Episode Offline was real
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Advanced Directing
Very Advanced Directing
Diversity Scale:
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Outfits Are Cute
Custom Backgrounds/ Overlays
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TL;DR: How did you code this?! Girl
Run at Midnight by @TiffyAlice
2 Episodes Read
Cover: Cute. Simple. Love the colours. Looks like a werewolf thing, though.
Big Cover: Also cute. Makes me wonder what got them to that point.
Description: Satisfactory. Maybe remove ātheā from the second sentence.
Title: I like it.
Backgrounds/Overlays: Work.
Animations/Directing: Works.
Sound: Works.
Spelling and Punctuation: Satisfactory. A few mistakes, but nothing that just sucks
Dialogue Boxes: Well placed. Pretty sure itās in the default color, but for some reason I felt like pointing out that I liked that.
Progression of Time: From the ending of the first Episode to the beginning on the second, I got confused
Pros:
ā¢ I was the 47th read xD
ā¢ I really liked that Tiffy was an athlete and Asian and a main character. Youāre right- you donāt see either of those a lot as main characters. It works well here.
ā¢ Characters have different heights
ā¢ Parisian music
Cons:
ā¢ What the hell is wrong with Amber
ā¢ Episode one ends after nothing happens
ā¢ I would be in class E
ā¢ Sometimes you say too much, either in dialogue boxes or readerMessage.
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Simple Directing
Advanced Directing
Diversity Scale:
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ā¢ In the first chapter, was the "He didnāt steal my heart, I let him take it supposed to pop up twice? In the second chapter, itās just kind of wonky overall.
TL;DR: Iām ready for some romance
Thank you soo much for the Review
And yep I know I Writes sheriff wrong because iām Dump Unfortunately, English is not my mother tongue I know Ayden is wild he will be wilder LOL
So the answers to your questions ā¦
So if Ayden escape, then he will be longer in jail,
Ayden is not just unstable or a psycho, but he is also clever, So he knows what he is doing, and he knows that he can escape, but Ayden thinks differentā¦ ā¦
Ayden is 20 and Lavera 17 i know itās illegal but they donāt do something dirty sooo
So imagine a psycho is free near where you live,
How would you have felt then? Yep, with a little panick.
honestly i didnāt think about it, when I first Writed my story but i think NYCā¦
The Sheriff is sure, because Ayden know what a killer is ticking as to what their next move is pointing. And Ayden can put himself in the killer.
So Ayden has done a punishment, where he does not have to go to jail so much, and the sheriff wanted to give him a year first, which means he has to go to prison for a long time, and two years would be enough? I explain it confusing I know lol sorry.
lol, well some siblings have a close relationship, And they lived for a long time alone, So they just know each other very well and love each other very much like siblings LOL.
I hope I answered your questions thank you so much again for the Review
Tell me the questions girl for sure you donāt need to do it lol.
Thx again for the Review have a beautiful day
Hi!
I would love a review of my new story. Any and all feedback is welcome!
I will also add your story to my favorites and give you feedback as well!
Here is the info:
Title: Dark Essence
Description: When the darkness inside threatens to break free & destroy everything you hold dearā¦ Will you seek comfort in the ones you love or allow your Dark Essence to take over? (Lim CC)
Episodes: 3
Genre: Fantasy
Style: Limelight
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6025752143069184
I know you are still working down the list would it be alright if I added a second story??
(If not just ignore this)
Title: Soul Slave
Genre: Fantasy (Sci-Fi/Romance)
Description: Lilly, an edgy teen and alien enthusiast, scores sold out tickets to the Annual Alien Expo. While there, things get a little weird, even by her standards! (LL/SL/NH)
NH = Narration Heavy
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4645740920242176
@sls.exe
Hey just wanted to inform you this.
Currently my story is being revamped,so i think it would be best, if you could just msg me before reviewing my story so I could say the status of my story. Thank You!
Title Break Away
Genre Drama
Style Ink
Author Giana
Chapters 9 (10 is half way done!)
Link http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5048325481234432
Description Twins Blythe and Braxton have only had each other. Until Holden and Collin came along. What happens when one twin wants to follow a path of love, desire, and destruction?
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