It’s called Swimming With Lust
I had help, but they won’t respond.
I’m on Episode 3.
Here’s the link:
The story needs some work
• You need background characters
• When she got to school they automatically went to lunch.
• I felt some music was needed.
• The plot didn’t get me into it
Where did you get that cafeteria background?
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Hi so I read your story ^^
I hope this can help:
- Episode 1:
- Use @transition fade in/out in color in time
*Be careful when your characters are speaking, use @CHARACTER faces right/left so they look to the right person. - More background characters.
- Spot directing in the party scene.
- Size of your character, some could be taller or smaller.
- overlay “crowd” in your party scene is weird, don’t put that, use backgrounds characters.
- overlay “body” after the murderer is too small…
- you can ask an artist to make you splashes (intro, outro, mature themes…)
- Episode 2:
- overlay “blanket” is really weird on that scene, I have one if you want?
- Place your overlays correctly in your scene with the reporter.
In general:
- What is the plot?
- Who are they?
- Where are we? Period? City?
You need to work on that because I didn’t get the point of your story…
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Thanks! And the blanket overlay would be awesome!
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So do you know the insta of who made that cafeteria bg?
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