I’ve managed tor reply much sooner than I thought so here it goes…(I’m not overly great at reviews).
I liked the idea behind your story as I love a good mystery (who doesn’t!?) but it felt rather rushed?
They’re weren’t transitions between scenes apart from on a few occasions which made the time lapses rather difficult to follow as it was only a narrator saying 3 years later e.t.c to separate them.
The conversations didn’t flow very genuinely, it felt rather robotic. (You’ve made me blush was used quite a lot too). Some of the words you’ve used aren’t typical for an everyday conversation, I understand they are synonyms for more simple words but sometimes simple is better.
I think it may have just been my expectation rather than an issue, but I thought I would have more choices? Especially because of the message at the beginning of Episode 1.
I will be re-reading though because my ending raised more questions than answers so it will bug me if I don’t find out 