Story description help please?

What do you think of this story description?

“When the pharmacy Wren works at gets robbed she tries to find the culprit, little does she know she just the crossed the line between good and bad. Rom-com ink”

Would you read? :confused:

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Do you mean the story description? Cause if so it sounds really good!

Ya sorry story description and tyyyyyy

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If you have spare characters, add in puncutation.

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I really liked the description hyped me up to read it, guess the punctuation needs a little change (my opinion, you don’t have to go through if you don’t want to :heart: )

When the pharmacy Wren works at gets robbed, she tries to find the culprit. Little does she know she would cross the line between good and bad. Rom-com ink

Either ways, I liked the idea and the description :heart_eyes:

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No problem!

Also I think there should be a comma after robbed and the comma after culprit should be a period

Awwwwww ty and will do

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No problem happy to help :heart:

Ok ty

There are some grammatical mistakes. Try to avoid them to avoid misunderstandings. I would rewrite that as the following: When the pharmacy Wren works at gets robbed, she tries to find the culprit. Little does she know, she just the crossed the line between good and bad. (Rom-com & ink)
Sounds good though! Happy writing!

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That sounds really good, I would recommend that too! :smile:

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