Story Ideas And Tips On An Ongoing Story

I have just started episode again after having a break. and was wondering if anyone could have a look at my story and give me some feedback on it. and if you would like me to give some feedback on your stories please let me know :smile:. My story is called See Me. I’m also Writing Another story at the moment which is a romantic story so any suggestions or ideas on plots would be appreciated.
Thank you

I read 2 chapters. Sorry I don’t have time for reading more right now.
I will private message you my thoughts .