Maybe take off the sound when the characters scream. It doesn’t blend well with the action. Taking the screams off is best.
Fix the pauses. Some are too long and the characters are just idling for awhile.
Fix the overlays. Maybe work with them a bit smoother. They seems to kinda stay in one place at moments and it would make sense to kinda make them a bit smoother with the actions.
You’ve done this a small amount of time, but make sure u make a character idle or do something while the characters are having a conversation (When characters are talking and one is saying something make sure the other character is doing something. One scene ether character was upset and then the other person started talking and it seemed as if she was bipolar or something and started smiling) so maybe remember that.
Some of the transitions from scene to scene is off. Like its glitches a tiny bit. As if u put @ for placing characters instead of &.
Some of the transitions are odd. Make sure u preview and make sure the transitions are fixed. I believe a couple of times u put in, instead of out or the other way around. Some people, including me gets annoyed when someone transitions and they don’t end the transition meaning if u faded to another scene but only used out instead of using out and in.
The spot directing is really good. There are some scenes where there’s a kiss and it’s a bit off and there was a slap in the second episode that was off.
Maybe when you’re narrating how a character is feeling, instead of the character actually thinking about it. Use the narration bubble instead of thought bubbles.
Remember to not make the character action dramatic. That’s where some people mess up. When speaking and it’s not totally a dramatic scene. Calm down on the animations and don’t make them too dramatic.
Alright, the story is really good! I enjoyed it very much. The story itself made me want to read it more and of course that’s what your going for.
I like the length of the episodes, which is a big thing for people. I feel like it’s perfect and u should keep it up.
Your grammar is really good, tbh. You might’ve missed some comas here and there, but overall it’s awesome.
If you have any questions feel free to ask me!