Hope, I read the first 4 episodes of, “Fighter” (since they were split into sections).
I think that the idea for the story is good and has potential for a good plot, but the way it is portrayed makes the story seem uninteresting. It doesn’t really grab the reader and I think maybe add something that is capable of making some really want to keep reading.
At the beginning of the story, it breaks the 4th wall by the main character talking directly to the audience, and then she talks through narrating, and then she narrates through her thoughts. In the other episodes though, she purely sticks to narrating. I think you should go back to the first episode and choose one so it gives it a more put together look and feel.
I think some of the scenes were awkwardly short and made reading uncomfortable. In that I am saying not to stretch out a scene but to make sure each scene has purpose and relevance to the story.
The character introductions in the beginning were a bit confusing. I feel like your story would flow better if you introduced each character as needed, not all at once.
Also, in the story sometimes it references highschool, and sometimes she says college, but she also said she is 14. When you review and edit just make sure you go back and decide on one to maintain throughout the story.
My last advice is that in the middle of your story you put up a warning. I would suggest that instead of placing a warning in the middle of an episode to place it at the start of each episode.
I think that this story has great potential, but you just need to take your time on it.
Good luck with writing!