Story review for Beans Bixby: Private Eye
Story description: 4/5. Personally, I believe that the story has potential after only reading its description. It seems quite intriguing and engaging, and I think you, as author, have written an interesting description that catches the readers’ eyes. If there were something negative to comment on, it would have to be the shortness. Nonetheless, a well-written description.
Episode length: 4/5. Very good! You seem to add the necessary scenes and an acceptable length to each chapter. None of which are inconsistent, and they all seem to have the same length. Very well done!
Story cover: 3.5/5. You seem to use Episode avatars in the cover as well as the addition of some overlays. This is of course an acceptable cover, but there is nothing much to point out. I think the colors that you have chosen fit the mystique of the story. Well done!
Sound: 4/5. Again, the sound and musical use in the story is top-notch. You seem to have a grip on when to use the sounds. They are a nice addition to the reader’s engagement. Some sounds are overused throughout the story, but I think you manage to use as many as you can at whichever fitting scene.
Plot score: 3/10. I understand your idea behind the story’s plot, but it just seems a little silly to me. If that is your idea, then great. I have nothing against the fact that you enjoy writing in the comedy genre/field and I must admit that some scenes were humorous. However, this story just exists and it does not feel like the story is moving at all. This results in lacking of character development, which in return ruins the story engagement for the reader. I think the comedy in your story is GOLD sometimes, but again, silly.
Directing: Irrelevant, or hard to rule out. This will not affect your score.
Grammar: 6.5/10. The reason as to why I subtracted two points is that you chose to use a simplistic form of language. Now, this is very acceptable, but it may not always be a positive note. Other than that, there were some errors. You write; “So today, I got this request that they lost an orange at this here bus stop-“. This should be corrected to; “So today I got this request that they lost an orange at this bus stop”.
Character Development: Hard to rule out. This will not affect your score.
Diversity: 6.5/10. You have added some diversity to your story with the addition of people with different ethnical backgrounds. You have failed to inform the reader, which ethnicity the characters originate from and it makes the reader doubt if they are of another country.
Total score: 31,5/60.
Star rating based on the review: 3/4 out of