Story Reviews/Tips!


#1

I would love to review your story!

I do reviews through the instagram account epy.geeks.

I have openings and love to help individuals get constructive feedback on their stories!


#2

My story isn’t published yet but I’d just like some preliminary feedback. Feel free to only read the first episode! And thanks for your time!

Instagram: episode_rb
Title: Switched Royalty
Author: Robin Bennet
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6597730759081984
Summary: Thrust into the life you were suppose to live, into the middle of a revolution, and romance- can you save your nation?


#3

I’d love if you gave my story a review. I recently just improved the first 4 chapters and it took a LONG time! :slight_smile:

Instagram: anniek.episode
Title: Gang Affiliated
Author: Annie K.
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6729805148717056
Description: Teenage girl Jupiter is suddenly forced into the gang life, followed the drama, trauma, and sexy gang leaders.


#4

Hey! Im also in Insta! I would love to hear your thoughts xx

Story Title : The Art of The Deal
Author : GraceX
Style : Ink
Episodes : 14 ongoing
Genre: Action/Comedy/Slight Romance
Link:http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4622710791208960
Description: Isobel lives a secret life but is captured by Dark Chaos, a gang with a twist. Fighting for the greater good! But have there lives crossed before?
Insta: epy.gracex

Thank you so much in advance!! xxx


#5

Here’s my story:
Title: Darkness
Author: Dani
Genre: Romance/Mystery
Style: Ink
Description: If you can’t get away from darkness, you learn to live with it… A vampire story!
Episodes: 5 (more to come)
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5439290271858688
Instagram: daniepisodewriter
I hope you like it! :black_heart:


#6

Please message me on insta @epy.geeks and let me know if you would like the review posted or simply through DM :slight_smile:


#7

Please message me on instagram @epy.geeks and let me know if you would like the review posted or simply through DM :slight_smile:


#8

Please message me on insta @epy.geeks and let me know if you would like the review posted or simply through DM! :slight_smile:


#9

Please message me on insta @epy.geeks and let me know if you would like the review posted or simply through DM. :slight_smile:


#11

Hey, i’d appreciate it if you good give a review on my story.
Title: SHANKED!
Author: feck.b
Category: action/adventure
Description: She runs in tears, bumping into a “school friend” stabbing someone. Forced to join in a British gang,What Will Haunt Her Now?
Instagram: feck.b (sneak peeks and edits will be posted once my followers are up).
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5563581969596416Story
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This story also uses East London slang.


#12

Hi! I would appreciate an honest review <3

Form: Ink
Username: ltxo
Author Name: Lara
Story Title: From Girly to Manly
Genre: Romance/Fantasy/Adventure
Description: Ever since the new queen’s reign the kingdom has been divided. There is a barrier between men and women. What happens if you have to pretend to be a boy, but then start to fall for the guy you deceived? [CC]
Published: Yes, Episode 8 so far

Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5238987157798912


#13

Hey, can you please review my story?? _

Title: Romantic Cruise
Author: Lawful Evil
Style: Ink
Genre: Romance, Drama
Episodes: 4 [Completed] 2 endings
Description: You break up with your cheating boyfriend and go on a cruise. What will happen if you meet a mysterious dangerous man? Customize Characters
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4697971707478016


#14

HI there! I would love a review on my first story. Here are the details:
Title: H & V: Lie to me
Author: Alexandra Mar
Genre: Mystery/Drama with romantic subplots
Description: After only serving 3 years of a 25 to life sentence, Aiden Suarez is mysteriously released. But wait, what’s that? Oh right, “Aiden Suarez” no longer exists.
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6378501067505664
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#15

Hi, @AshSmashum!

Thank you very much for creating this thread, this is very kind of you! Constructive criticism is exactly what I am looking for!

If you are interested in reading a story with several mini-games and where CHOICES REALLY MATTER then, please, give my story a try. This is my first story ever but I have put a lot of effort in it and would highly appreciate any feedback! I promise, the story will keep you hooked :blush:

My story details:

Name of story: H & V: Fate
Author: Alex Af
Genre: Thriller
Episodes: 4 (completed)
Summary of story: Young ambitious journalist hunting down a powerful tycoon who has made a fortune based on lies. But who really is a villain here? Choices matter.
Link to story: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6548486212681728
Instagram: @episode.alex.af


#16

So the story was only four episodes long, which is fine but it makes the story move a little to fast and this can get a little confusing because of that. I found myself a little confused at points because I was trying to keep up with the story. There were a few grammatical errors, I would suggest having someone go over your script to adjust those as needed, if you needed help with that. The spot directing was pretty good, a little simple but simple is better then bad spot directing.

Overall the plot was good, it was just the execution that was a little off. I would honestly suggest to maybe make it a few episodes longer so you can really lay out the story and the characters a little slower so the reader can keep up!

If you make any changes and would like a second review, check out my group page @epy.geeks or if you have any further questions you can talk to me there as well. I would love to help you further if you’d like. :slight_smile:


#17

Ok well first off as an (almost) therapist I really appreciate you using correct terminology (manic episode) when talking about Smiles in the very beginning. Also love the Pierce the Veil quote (one of my fav bands) BUT I’m not sure if that overlay was supposed to cover both versions of Aiden? It looked a little funky and I wasn’t sure of why it was there.

When reading the text message from Jill it says “The police is looking for you.” It should be the Police are looking for you, so make sure you are double checking your grammar! :slight_smile:

The use of overlays was really good! I was really impressed with what you were able to do with them!

Spot directing and zoom were also really good, there were no major errors that I noticed.

When Mia is in the car with Dylan you have a moving background, which is usually nice for driving scenes if you are looking at a car for the side, so since this view is from the inside of the car so it doesn’t make a lot of sense. This could be a personal thing BUT it was really distracting to me, again this could be a personal thing it might not bug others.

I loved Aiden’s little comment about not being able to find work and asking how that could help recidivism rates, it made me giggle.

Overall, I loved this story! I’m excited to see what happens next!!!


#18

Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review my story! It really means a lot!

I double majored in psych and crim, Aiden’s comment and the use of “maniac episode” were definitely intentional. Glad you liked them!

I knew I wanted to include a quote at the beginning of every chapter. I was not sure where to include it, and decided to just have it fade in when Aiden is staring at himself in the mirror. I’ll try to come up with a new way of introducing the quotes :slight_smile:

Thank you for letting me know about the grammar mistake! I know some people get offended when they are corrected, but I am non-native English speaker. Though I consider myself fluent, I know I still make mistakes, which is why I really appreciate those corrections. I will make sure to correct it!

You are right about the car scene with Mia and Dylan, I see why it looks weird.

Once again, thank you so much for taking the time to read my story! I really, really, REALLY, appreciate the feedback. I am currently reading all the stories I promised to read. The goal is to send out all my reviews by tomorrow night. If for some reason you don’t hear back from me before then, feel free to PM as many times as needed. I won’t flake on you :slight_smile:


#19

Sounds good! I will do that. I’m excited to see what happens next in your story! And for being a non-native English speaker your writing is really good!


#20

Hey! Just an FYI I’m working on your review next! I’m trying to make sure I get all the H&V stories done first since you guys are on a deadline for the contest :slight_smile:


#21

OMG, thank you SO MUCH, this is really considerate of you! I am looking forward to your feedback!

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