Hey guys so i published my new story on the episode app
story title : Teach Me Your Love!
I need someone to read it and tell me their opinion on it.
i posted the first five chapters I promise I update fast!
Hey guys so i published my new story on the episode app
story title : Teach Me Your Love!
I need someone to read it and tell me their opinion on it.
i posted the first five chapters I promise I update fast!
You can come over to this thread where Jade makes some good reviews that help authors improve their stories.
Thankss
Teach Me Your Love By Perry
Runtime: 7:46
Overall, your story has a lot of potential. It is quite fast paced, which doesn’t allow the reader to develop a relationship with the characters. This is shown where Damon goes from immediately disliking Jane, to flirting with her. You use music well. However, I find the amount of grammatical errors and directing errors distracting. This includes missing punctuation, lack of capitalisation and bad speechbubble placement.
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In my opinion, Teach me your love isn’t grammatically correct.
To save space, you can use CC instead of customizable, but that’s your preference.
The splash is incredibly short.
Outside
Living Room
Kitchen
The rest of the scenes include the same mistakes that I’ve already stated, so I won’t state them again.
Thanks for the advice about capitalizing and narrating
i fixed the speech bubbles in the episodes that are after episode 1 and there is actually a reason for damon’s confusing behavior that all readers will find out in episode 6
Gotcha, I should have clarified that I’d only read episode 1.
I’m glad to hear that. And thank you for taking my feedback onboard. I know it may come across as blunt. I look forward to rereading it sometime.
Thanks ,Your review is really helpful now i can improve my writing
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