Tell Me How I Can Improve This

I’m trying to write a story but I need help…
Look at the story and give feedback!
Say ANYTHING! (As long as you won’t get reported)
Yes I know it is short!
~Thanks!
Or somehow you want to help out and edit with me than we can do that!
<3

http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4861276413034496

Here are my thoughts and opinions. Don’t go raging or hating on me. These are my thoughts.:

  1. It was kind of all over the place, like. I thought she was a wolf but she wasn’t? She just liked them.
  2. The transitions were weird. The transitions were put but then you could still see the background.
    (At the end I’ll show you something.)
  3. Try using different transitions throughout your story. Using only fade will make it quite boring.

Alright. I’ll show you a script for doing transitions… Like a template, if you are doing fade.
(scene is over) @transition fade out COLOR in TIME
THE NEXT SCENE BACKGROUND
@transition fade in COLOR in TIME

Different transitions:
@transition fade in/out

@transition iris in/out

@transition shade up/down

@transition curtain in_left

out_left

in_right

out_right

in_top

out_top

in_bottom

out_bottom
Overall, I really liked it!

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I think I fixed the weird transitions, I will make them better as I keep editing this episode. Again, Thanks for your advice
@Kaci.Episode