I Update my story i hope it not boring nomore
Here is my story I will check out yours too
here’s mine! thanks so much! i’ll be reading yours as well!
Title: Mystery on Hanging Hill Lane
Author: Marshmallow O.
Genre: Mystery, Romance, Comedy (Thriller)
Summary: It’s a race against time as you and your friends try to escape the mysterious sleepover that you were invited to…
Chapters: 6 (More to come)
Full CC, Choices Matter, Point System, Advanced Directing, 2 LI!
Thank you so munch
Would you like to do a r4r with me?
Story: Adventurous: Time Immune
Summary: When loud-mouth Mikea sets off on a road-trip with YOU, it becomes harder to hide the truth of your origin… oh, and that you are an immortal cyborg.
CC, POC, LGBT, multiple endings
Story: Sorry, Wrong Number
Summary: “And that’s how we’ll get rid of the body. Sorry, wrong number.”
When a text is sent to the wrong person, it leads to a race against time to prevent a murder. TEXT BASED
I recently revamped my story, and I would love to do a read 4 read
Title: Unbearable Pain
Genre: It’s a mix of fantasy, action and drama.
Author: Koolgal77 (me )
The SAO’s goal is to place unbearable pain in the hearts of every supernatural. They have waged a war, one which a cursed bloodline must stop. The question is: Why the Costellos?
Instagram handle: @koolgal.epi
Covers: They are done by the talented @epysar on Instagram.
I hope you enjoy my story if you do give it a read.
Ok i will read your story
I like your story keep up the good work
I always will - Episode 1
Your episode lasted 1 minute and 30 seconds. Excluding CC, you have one scene. Throughout that ENTIRE scene, your character stands screen right and a NARRATOR’s dialogue box explains the back story. This is NOT an interactive story. This seems more like a book or watching a movie.
There are grammatical errors, lack of music and animation, which can make it quite boring to watch.
On the other hand, like I stated, if you were writing a book, then it could turn out good.
Cover, Title and Description
I would suggest centring the title on your small cover.
After her and Lucas break up. How this life changing news shakes up everyone’s life
Who is “her”? Unless she is customisable, use her name. If she is customisable, use you.
After her and Lucas’ break up, she receives some life changing news, which will shake up everyone’s lives.
Scene 1: CC and Intro
This Is you
This is you.
Capitalisation and punctuation.
I don't use INK often, but is this how the black hair colour looks? Comparing it to my PC, they look quite different.
Remove the speech mark - ".
The dialogue covers the splash.
It’s hard to read dialogue boxes with more than 2-3 lines of text in it.
There is a light grey vertical line in the script to the right. End your lines of dialogue before that. This also keeps the story moving and readers engaged.
I don’t want to have a character tell me about her day or her past, I want to see it.
I don’t want a paragraph of backstory, I want to learn about it while I play.
Integrate important information gradually into dialogue, don’t just write long paragraphs of information.
Scene 2: BEDROOM
In the morning he was gone. I didn’t know what I was" expecting. I could feel him pulling away from me for"
WEEKS now but last night we had dinner and walked" along
THE beach. It felt like old times. When I could see"
FEEL the love he had for me. He had showed up at my house
Dressed up. The entire evening had ended up"
BEING his way of making up for my birthday and the" DRAMA we were going through at the time. I had on a" FLOWING blue dress. He called me pretty girl and never"
LEFT my side. We had dessert on the beach. He drove me" HOME and the silence between us was comfortable.
I felt good and the insecurity I felt about him" lucas and kim"
He walked me to my door. And I thanked him for this beautiful night
He took me in his arms and kissed me again
He leaned over hugging me and I buried my face in his chest
Eventually we pulled apart. He didn’t let go of my hand.
Instead he kissed me. I kissed him back
Feeling my heart pound out of chest. And my head spin
I could of pushed him away. Told him to go home.
But I did neither of those things
I had broken up with him a week before. I never would of imagined that this is where we would be
Our bodies soon becoming one. As time and the world around us ceased to exist.
HAVE YOUR CHARACTER REACT TO WHAT’S BEING SAID.
In the morning, he was gone. I didn’t know what I was expecting.
I could feel him pulling away from me for weeks now.
@CHAR is deepbreath
But, last night we had dinner.
We walked along the beach.
It felt like old times - when I could see the love he had for me.
He had showed up at my house, dressed up.
The entire evening had ended up being his way of making up for my birthday…
And the drama we were going through at the time.
I had on a flowing blue dress.
CHANGE HER OUTFIT - SHOW THE SCENE
He called me a pretty girl and never left my side.
We had dessert on the beach.
Then, he drove me home and the silence between us was comfortable.
I felt good and the insecurity I felt about him, Lucas and Kim EVAPORATED
WHO IS LUCAS AND KIM?
He walked me to my door. And, I thanked him for this beautiful night.
He took me in his arms and kissed me again.
He leaned over hugging me, and I buried my face in his chest.
Eventually, we pulled apart, but he didn’t let go of my hand.
Instead, he kissed me, and I kissed him back.
I could feel my heart pound out of chest, and my head spin.
I could have pushed him away - told him to go home.
But I did neither of those things.
I had broken up with him a week before.
I never would of imagined that this is where we would be.
Our bodies soon becoming one, as time and the world around us ceased to exist.
Hey there, thanks for this topic
My story details are:
Author: May Laugh
Title: Trouble Twins
Episodes : 8 (going on)
Always standing up for each other through thick and thin, that is what these twins are all about. But can they really master every chaos together?
Link: [http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5334870588784640 ]
Here s my story maybe you can check it out as well
Title: Be Careful What You Wish For
Author: Luna Marie Rose
Only one wish changes her life.
Romance, lust, love, drama and suspense.
4 love interests (3 male, 1 female)
You were on the wrong foot by not having a cover. All you had was narration which was pretty boring, I skipped some lines and them BAM…THE END?? I was really hoping for a visual, because I really didn’t want a paragraph
Title: The Miller Family
Author: KR Iglesias
Episodes : 3 (more coming soon)
Summary : The Miller Family was already full of dramas and abnormal reactions, but what happens when an extra-sly dramatic kiddo enters ?
Style : Limelight