Sure! Thank you so so so much 
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Update: I am finally free again so i will be finishing reviews! @AdriGarai09 I have already finished episode 1 of your story and will be finishing it up tomorrow! Thank you all so much for your patience!
~Jae š«¶š½
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@AdriGarai09 REVIEW COMPLETE
ā¢ Your story is so unique and I absolutely love that about it! I havenāt read anything like it and thatās what makes a story great!
ā¢ Your coding abilities are amazing! There were so many advanced coding scenes that I saw that absolutely amazed me! Great job 
!
ā¢ I love point system stories! It makes it all the more interesting and really makes you think long and hard about what choices matter and which choice to make!
ā¢ Iāve already mentioned the mini games but the scroll mini game? MY ABSOLUTE FAVORITE! It was so amazingly coded and it was fun too! I almost missed one 
ā¢ The zooms and transitions were well placed and worked with your story and not against it and I love that! It really shows you put time and effort into these small things!
ā¢ I like the characters! I am still a little confused about all of their backstories but i found out little pieces as I read that helped a little bit!
ā¢ (1/2 pro 1/2 con) I like the use of flashbacks! I feel like they make stories so much more interesting when you can see into the past!!
ā¢ The suspense created by each character is definitely there! It makes you keep clicking until youāre at the end of the chapter and then makes you want to read the next episode so quickly lol! Great job !!
ā¢ Your use, animation, and coding of overlays was amazing! I love fantasy stories that actually use overlays and make them fit with the story!
ā¢ I did not customize Chloe so that the art scenes would make sense and Iām glad i didnāt! The art scenes were amazing! Kudos to you for creativity and kudos to the artists who made/drew them! It was amazing! 
ā¢ (The con of the 1/2 pro 1/2 con point) I loved the flashbacks but i felt like they shouldāve been under a different filter to make it clear to the reader that itās a flashback! Iāll include some screenshots i took from the flashback scenes so you can see what I mean! Iām not entirely sure why the filter faded away when it did but iām sure itās an easy fix when you go through your coding!
ā¢ I hope iāll be able to include the screenrecording for this but the scene where Chloe is crying, your overlay is moving from one zone to another! Just make sure that you loop coding isnāt having it move from one spot in one zone to another spot in another zone! But also with that same overlay it seems a bit too big for their faces! Which Iāll include below since I canāt include the screen recording! I use a overlay similar to yours and I tend to make it pretty small so it fits the charactersā faces! I would just try to size it down a bunch so it doesnāt look so out of place!
ā¢ There was a good bit of grammatical errors. Iāll include some I saw along the way! Whether English is not your first language or if you were trying to use a certain kind of speaking mannerism for your story, or it jus happened to be a mishap, just make sure to proofread! Even if you donāt want to, iām sure thereās someone in the community who would gladly do it for you! 
ā¢ Some of your scenes had no context and moved extremely fast! (example: when Albert offered to show Chloe around! These scene was then walking through the dark and two seconds and then it said āAfter the Tourā) You could take these scenes and expand them to give your story a lot more content! It would make it even more interesting!
ā¢ To piggy back off of the last point, episode 2 was extremely short! Again just use scenes like the one I mentioned above to fill your story up! That way, your story makes sense, your scenes and full and filled with content and your episodes donāt seem so short!
I love the story and plan to keep reading! Just make to proofread your ENTIRE story/epsidkes! Whether itās your coding or your grammar just make sure you (or someone else 
) goes over it to make sure you correct mistakes you may have made! And make sure to fluff your story up more with more content!!
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THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THE REVIEW!
True, English is not my first language but my English is pretty good or at least, I thought so : ) Iāll definitely proofread!
Alrighty!
Thanksssssssssssss
OMG thank you SO muchhh!!
So glad this was successful 
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Can I use this for promotion? 
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Iām not sure what you mean exactly! 
For promotion of my story*
Sure! I donāt mind.
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@Bellaex REVIEW COMPLETED
DISCLAIMER: This review will be nothing but praise from me lol
ā¢ The intro to the story is absolutely amazing! The way you allow the readers to read warnings, skip an episode and watch an episode is one of the most amazing pieces of coding i can see from an author!
ā¢ The plot and dynamic of the story is one of a kind and it is beyond intriguing! I loved every second of every episode i read!
ā¢ I actually ended up reading 4 out of your 8 episodes just because the story was so amazing! Lol, I didnāt want to put it down!!
ā¢ I LOVE your point system! I love the choices that matter and choosing one choice can ruin everything!
ā¢ Your outfit games were so much fun! I loved that coding so much! 
ā¢ The narration, the character dialogue, just the contents of the story itself was beyond amazing! The time and effort put into was absolutely phenomenal!
ā¢ The fact that you were able to give the reader the choice of who they were interested in dating was incredible! I love that for your story!!
ā¢ The coding and animation of your overlays is phenomenal! I loved every overlay that you used because they were used so well lol!!
ā¢ I love the choice of backgrounds you used! The fit your story so well and itās just amazing!
ā¢ The dynamic between characters is outstanding! Thereās a story for every relationship and every character has their own story as well!
ā¢ I didnāt notice ANY grammatical errors! And thatās hard to do for episodes that are the same length as yours! Outstanding job
ā¢ I love the music in your story! It just tied the scenes together perfectly!
ā¢ Transitions were amazing!!
ā¢The length of each episode was perfect! Not too long and not too short! Great job
You only have 8 episodes and I need 80 LOL
PLEASE KEEP WRITING THIS AMAZING STORY!! I cannot WAIT for you to keep writing because I will reading every episode you post!! 
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Oooh thank you so much for the review! 
Iām glad you enjoyed it.
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I cannot wait to finish reading the last four episodes! Your story is absolutely amazing!
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Hi, if youāre still taking review request.
Hereās mine.
Published Episode: 8/9 (Iām working on the finale.)
Link: Episode Writer Portal
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I am! Iāll add you for 3 episodes!
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Wow! Itās really kind of you to offer such a service. 
Iād be happy to show some gratitude by giving your own stories a read.
Iāve recently published my first story and so would really appreciate some feedback.
If youāre interested in my request, hereās my story:
Story: Domain for the Bygone
Author: Malia
Published episodes: 4
Description: Youāre sent on a journey to a distant planet after Earth receives a mysterious signal. But what you find will be far more horrifying than you could ever imagine.
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Link:
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Thank you so much! Iāll add your story to my list!! š«¶š½
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To everyone still waiting for a review:
I AM STILL TAKING REQUESTS AND DOING REVIEWS
i had some very personal stuff come up and put reviewing on hold for a little!
@JadeBeckson I have already started your review (i believe iām on episode 3 or 4) and will complete the other requests in the order in which they were received! Thank you all so much for your patience!
-Jae š«¶š½
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Thanks 
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Thank you and can you review my story for meā¤ļø
AUTHOR: hipsy_writes
STORY TITLE: OM:BEYOND CONTROL
GENRE: ACTION
STORY DESCRIPTION: Her dreams of becoming a pharmacist got shattered when her parents died. To survive, she has to make choices. Will this choices lead to a successful revenge or a painful death?
Link: Episode Writer Portal
CC/2LIās/POINT SYSTEM/ART SCENES/MINI GAMES/BONUS SCENES/CHOICES MATTERS/ADVANCED DIRECTING/GEM CHOICES
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Thank you! Iāll add this to my list!
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Thanks girl
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