The Galactic Story Review💫

[JadeBeckson]

Hi!! Are we still on for the review?

[bbygirlbrooks]

Hi yes!! I am so sorry for the long delay! I’ve had so much come up! I will be finishing them sometime this week!

[bbygirlbrooks]

@JadeBeckson REVIEW COMPLETED

"Thank you so so much for your patience!!!

• I really like the plot of your story! It just seems to keep my intrigued in a way that i wouldn’t have expected! Great job
• I like the use of your point system! Stories with the point system in use are so amazing!
• The diversity of your cast is great!!
•I like the touch of real world topics that you use!
• The length of the episodes are great!

• There were some grammatical errors in the story! I’ll upload the pictures i took of it! Just make sure to proofread before publishing!!

Pictures

• There was an animation that was repeated a lot that i felt did not go with the scenes. I’m not sure what this animation is but i feel like it should be changed to fit the scenes!

Pictures 2

• There were some coding errors that i was able to get! Again just make sure that you double check EVERYTHING before publishing!!

Pictures 3

• There we’re some things that happened in some scenes that didn’t make too much sense to me. For example when megan was decided on whether to invited the MC to her house and she called her parents in to ask and the first thing her mother says is “tell us sweetie”! Dialogue like this at least a little bit of context before it’s coded in otherwise it just makes the story seemed rushed!! I’ll include the a screenshot with this as well! Just make sure to include as much context as you can to make your story follow easier!!

Summary

• This goes with another bullet i made earlier but i just wanted to separate it to make it easier to understand! There were a lot of scenes that had the characters doing animations that did not go along with the dialogue and so it made it look like animations were just picked at random to go with these dialogue lines! I definitely think some of them should be changed to fit what the character is saying!

Summary

There were some other small things i wanted to point out here like the way some of the characters interacted (mainly the mother and daughter) but other than that i think this story is amazing other than it’s few issues! I believe all this story needs is some really intense proofreading to make sure that everything is up to par!

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[TheMorrigan]

Hi! Thank you for this!

It’s A Coincidence, Isn’t It? (3 episodes)
LGBTQ+
Male MC, Male LI
Point system, mini-games, full CC
Amante’s life was turned upside down when he met the clumsy Lochlan. It seems that he finally found his happiness. But was meeting him a coincidence?

[bbygirlbrooks]

Thank you! I’ll add you to the list! 🫶🏽

[TheMorrigan]

Thank you so much

[JadeBeckson]

Thank you so much for the review!!!
Unfortunately I can’t find a proofreader and english is not my first language, but I’ll keep checking!
I’m also not very good with directing and animations etc…
Thank you so much for the advice

[LadyGraci]

Title: A Touch Of Moonlight
Genre: Fantasy/Romance
Author Name: Graciela P.B.

Description: Aileen has been in hiding her whole life. As the last Silver Princess, she faces great danger if found. What will happen when she gets accepted into the Royal School of Magic? (work in progress)

Link: [Episode Writer Portal] (not published)
Total amount of chapters: I have only 3 chapters for the moment.

[bbygirlbrooks]

Thank you! I’ll add you to the list!

[shiv.episode]

Thank you for doing this!

Title: My New Beginning
Genre: Drama/Romance
Author Name: Shiv.episode

Description::Aviana always had a challenging life, but can she find something else for herself in search of her mom in New York? Will she find the love and trust she’s always wanted in life? LL
Chapters Published: 8 chapters published and more coming soon
Features: Gem-Free, Music, Fully Customize your Character, Family & LI. Art Scenes and more choices coming soon!
Instagram name :@/shiv.episode
Link: [Episode Writer Portal ]Episode Writer Portal
Small Cover:

Thank you again for offering this! 3 or 4 chapters are fine to review

[bbygirlbrooks]

Thank you so much! I’ll add you on!

[bbygirlbrooks]

@TheMorrigan REVIEW COMPLETE

• I honestly don’t even know where to begin with this review because this story was that AMAZING
• Your Intro is absolutely amazing! From the animated overlays to the “Skip, Start, Customize” options, to the animated text! All of it is absolutely amazing!! I absolutely love it
• The mini games are so fun and so well coded! It amazing what one person can do! You are an amazing coder and author! I’ve never seen such complex things be coded so well and be so much fun
• LOVE the point system and how you’ve given your points a name and how, of course, the points matter for this story! Amazing job
• The plot of the story is amazing! I have a few theories about it that I’ll keep to myself so it’s not spoiled for anyone else
•Your story flows together like a well oiled machine! Everything goes together so well and I absolutely LOVE it
• Just like your intros, your outros are absolutely phenomenal! I love everything you’ve done with it!
• The character diversity is something I love to see in stories! Great job
• The level of creativity in this story is astounding! I love the “Multiverse” section at the end! I cannot wait to give one of those a try!!
• I’ve mentioned this before but the animation of every overlay was absolutely flawless!! It was amazing!!

• There’s only 3 episodes and i need 30

Your story is by far one of the best ones I’ve reviewed since I started doing reviews!! I cannot wait to see where you take this amazing story!!

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[bbygirlbrooks]

Thank you to everyone requesting! I’m going through and finding the incomplete requests and doing then ASAP!! I am trying to stay in order but please forgive me if I don’t! However I will still be doing reviews for everyone who requested one! 🫶🏽

[TheMorrigan]

Thank you so much! I’m crying
Thank you for your time, and I’m really glad you enjoyed it

[alysin]

hi! first of, i love the whole vibe of your post–it feels so welcoming and fun
secondly, if you still have room for another story, i’d love to see what you think of mine! i put in it a drop-down menu in case you aren’t taking them yet.

story details

(cover art is by @dana_i_nana )
Story Title: Ghosted
Description: After losing your soulmate before your wedding day, you decide to give up on love. But when he returns as a ghost a year later, things could get a little complicated…
Total Episodes: 11 (it will have 14 in total, i update every Thursday!)
Genre: Drama (romcom/drama, with random one-liners )
What to expect: A hot and mysterious LI, fun and relatable side characters and a ghost-sidekick-wingman
Story Link: Episode Writer Portal

[Tabitha_Williams_3]

Hey! Thank you for this thread . Here is my recently revamped LL story down below that I want a review on:
Story Title: Monster Castle LL
Author: Tabitha Williams <3
Short Description: You saw a video of the Monster Castle. You also won the contest but, was
this all an evil plot?

Episodes: 3
Genre: Horror
Story Link: Episode Writer Portal

[bbygirlbrooks]

Hi!! Yes i’ll add you!! My post is full of tags but I’ll add you to the list!!

[bbygirlbrooks]

Hi! Yes I’ll add you to the list!

[bbygirlbrooks]

UPDATE:

I have slowed down on reviews due to my work schedule, however i am still taking review requests and will get to the in order ASAP! Thank you all so much for being so patient and kind

[LadyGraci]

Hi! I was wondering if you could maybe keep my review as last of the list? I’m making some changes to each chapter so it will be very confusing for you. Thank you for taking your time to do this!