Our Reviews for the story Izzy has a Job by @CStation 
Annieways' Review
First impression
I love the covers. Your description is a little all over the place but it’s good that it already implies that this is going to be a comedy, it makes me think your story is in the right genre.
Characters
I liked Izzy, I could relate to her on different levels and her best friend is an interesting character too. I would like to see more of the other characters though, because I didn’t really get to know anything about them.
Plot
I liked the original idea, I think it’s great that you didn’t write another cliche romance story and I was positively surprised that there’s was no love interest presented yet. It doesn’t mean I suggest you to avoid adding any kind of romance, but I’m glad that this story doesn’t revolve around this.
I was interested in the job searching process, but the pacing was very fast and there were several scenes that didn’t really add anything to the plot (for example the videos that Izzy was watching in her bedroom.) I think it would be more interesting if you tested Izzy and her friend whether they are suitable for a particular job. It feels a little unrealistic that they automatically get hired to any job they apply to.
Directing
I think your directing would need some work, so I will try to list a few things you may want to check out:
- Izzy pops up on screen in some scenes
- It would look much better if you used transitions between the different scenes
- Pay attention on closing your animations: your characters keep talking when they are not supposed to
- When they are looking at the vendor guy, Izzy is facing the wrong way
- At the graveyard Aztro and Joe are not showing up on my phone. I thought this was a glitch but after closing and reopening the app I still cannot see them, so I thought you may want to know
- Cosmic and the guys look very small compared to Izzy and Kiyance in the bedroom scene
Grammar
I’m not sure why you did this, but words are capitalized in the middle of the sentences, while ‘I’ is not.
Punctuation is missing almost everywhere, and it’s more important than you think, it can be an instant turn-off for several readers.
I’m pretty sure that some sentences are grammatically incorrect, but I’m not the best at spotting this 
Anyways, here are two examples:
- No way man! I thought you
waswere different - Did you finally
realizedrealize pet plants aren’t for freaks?
Overall
Honestly, I don’t think we have the same sense of humour, but I see why you put the story into comedy and it definitely fits. I like the concept, but as I mentioned above, the implementation would need some work in my opinion.
I have to tell you that normally I wouldn’t continue a story if the author thinks it’s “too short and boring”, so instead of apologizing in an author note, I would suggest you to revamp your episodes and maybe add a few scenes if you think they are too short 
Good luck!
Thank you to @Annieways for this review.
_haruka's Review
Izzy Has a Job - Review
Chapter 1
Things in bold need to be corrected. Things in italic are other comments.
“Before you start the story, here are some things to remembe r. ” - here, since there is more than one thing to remember, here are would suit better. Also, a mistake that I’ve noticed several times is the lack of periods/full stops, so remember to put those in!
“This is not a love story, it’s a comedy, t hough I MIGHT add some very little ships/ship scene s .” - here, you capitalised letters that don’t need to be capitalised. I have noticed a few capitalisation issues throughout this episode, so I’ll give a few bits of advice at the end of this review. And remember your periods/full stops!
“This story takes place in the year 2107.” - add the ‘the’.
“This is my first ever story in Episode, but enjoy !” - but and enjoy do not need capital letters.
Izzy: “Ah… it was finally summer!” - it doesn’t need to be capitalised.
Izzy: “But oh boy, was I wrong.” - the was doesn’t need to be capitalised.
^^ Don’t use capital letters after commas. It’s not necessary.
Izzy: “… an independen t, hard working…” - I didn’t write the full sentence here, but add a comma after independent, and don’t then capitalise hard working.
Mom: “Oh hey sweeetiee …!” - the hey and the sweetie do not need to be capitalised.
Izzy: “I thought you were different!” - here, change the ‘was’ to ‘were’. I know it might be because of dialect or informal speaking, but from the way Izzy speaks, it seems out of character for her to suddenly start speaking this way.
Izzy: “Did you finally reali ze pet plants aren’t for freaks?” - here, use realize instead of realised.
General Comments
This was a good episode, and like you said, an introduction episode. It had several funny elements, fits well in the comedy genre. I think the main thing is to work on putting periods/full stops where necessary and learning where and where not capital letters are necessary.
Punctuation Tips
Always put some sort of ending punctuation at the end of a sentence. These include:
. ! ?
Capital Letters:
When writing titles, such as ‘Capital Letters’ (above), capitalise every substantial word. There is no need to capitalise words like a, an, etc.
Capitalise proper nouns. Proper nouns are places or names of people. Like London, America, Anna, Bob.
Important: do not capitalise the word after a comma unless it is a proper noun. I saw this error a lot in this story, so it would be great to just check that 
Thank you to @_Haruka for this review.
JemU776's Review
Episode 1 Review of Izzy has a Job :
Before you start the story, here are some things to remembe r: <-the h in here shouldn’t be capitalized. You wrote here’s (here + is). There is more than one thing you’re telling the reader so better to go with here are .
1. T his episode is <-Put a dot after 1 instead of comma. Also, take out this part of the episode being an intro more than an episode. You can say it’s an introduction but if you say it isn’t much of an episode, people may not want to read.
2. This is not a love story, it’s a comedy. I might add a few romantic scenes, though. <- this is much smoother to write.
You mentioned this story takes place in the year 2107 (the y in year shouldn’t be capitalized and you don’t need to repeat the year again since the reader already knows.)
Three dots (…) instead of two.
You capitalized some letters when they shouldn’t have been capitalized.
"Playing video games, going to the beach, grocery shopping" <- much smoother to write.
i should be capitalized so that it becomes I. “Was I wrong” NOT “was i wrong”
Hahaha, I love how you said she was a 16 year old lazy creature, I wish I could relate but at that age, I was super active XD
No dark past? Izzy is so lucky sigh
Strict moms, yikes! I can’t wait to see more of Izzy and her mom’s relationship. Also, I really adore Izzy’s name, it’s very unique.
“if I’m being honest.”<- I’m, not i’m
Izzy does some weird walking movements which I’d recommend fixing.
When Izzy talks with her friend Kiyance, there’s a lot of missing periods, capitalized letters that shouldn’t be capitalized and a few other mistakes. Kiyance’s name so reminds me of Beyoncé.
The house isn’t really futuristic theme. It looks nice and rich but I recommend making it more future themed.
Izzy and the mom’s fight wasn’t that intense but nonetheless it was enjoyable to read about.
“Blue bananas were sold out” <- were, not we’re (we are)
“I thought you were different.” were instead of was.
When both of them look at the vendor dude (his display name should have a space BTW) Izzy faces the other direction. Make her face the vendor.
“Hey! It’s me, the author CStation.”<- the t in the shouldn’t be capitalized.
Overall, I did enjoy and you had some funny moments like the choice of dancing at a mall or screaming at a mall. Good job! 
Thank you to @JemU776 for this review.
Mint-Episode's Review
My review in Episode 1 of “IZZY HAS A JOB”
I love the cover!
At the start, ‘Here’s’ should be ‘here’s’.
Full stop after ‘remember’.
There should be a full stop after each number e.g. 1.
- Full stop after 'episode.
- ‘It’s’ should be ‘it’s’. No comma needed after ‘comedy’. ‘Though’ should be ‘though’. Full stop after 'scenes.
- Full stop after ‘2017’.
- ‘in’ should be ‘on’. No comma needed after ‘episode’. You can use 'so instead of ‘But’. Three dots not needed before ‘Enjoy!’.
- You can add text animation before ‘Enjoy!’ to add emphasis.
When Izzy starts to narrate, you have two dots. In this case, ‘It’ should be ‘it’. ‘No’ befire school should be ‘no’. (Text animation). Just a full stop after ‘drama’. Instead of ‘and’ you can use 'it’s.
“Oh boy was I wrong.”
I am not feeling this statement hear. Not sure how to rephrase it, you might want to take another look at it: " I wasn’t ready for one hella crazy right."
“May be it was better than what my normal summer would’ve been like.”
“Well, you will never know unless you read about my crazy journey this summer.”
“This is getting sappy now. I have bit one advice for you:”
“Put your seatbelt on, it’s gonna be a bumpy ride!”
-When we first meet Izzy, she pops in after the scene changes. Work on that please probably &Izzy so and so.
‘Not very smart but’
‘I try.’
Full stop after ‘me’.
If you are going to have capital letters after every comma where it says: “No dramatic crap”, use a full stop instead of the commas.
Full stop after ‘old’. ‘She’ should be ‘she’. Full stop after ‘her’. Comma after ‘independent’ and full stop after ‘woman’.
“However I’m not like that if I’m being honest.”
-When you transitioned to the flower shop, use @Izzy enters from right to screen center.
" 'Sup" should be " 'sup".
“I have some news.”
“It depends on you. ( or you can say it depends on how you will react) Anyway I think your Mom isn’t gonna give you a weekly allowance anymore.”
" you should go and ask her. (Not sure why you had ‘them’ since she’s talking about her mom.)"
Full stop after ‘shop’. ‘Then’ should be ‘then’ and full stop after ‘walk’. ‘Right?’ should be ‘right?’. Full stop after ‘freak’ and ‘Bye’.
- In the car
‘Drive’ should be ‘drive’. Full stop after ‘location’ and ‘Izzy’.
- At home
‘Welcome’ should be ‘welcome’. ‘Tell’ should be ‘tell’ and full stop after ‘here’.
-Shouldn’t it be something like: “Sure, message delivered.”
“Hey, Sweetiee!” (Text animation)
“Mom, are you cutting my allowance?”
Full stop after ‘heard’ and ‘games’.
“Well, let me remind you.”
-Flashback
I recommend having Izzy doing a different animation when we enter the flashback scene.
“Hey Mom, what’s up?” No comma needed after ‘out’. You only need a question mark after ‘cafe’. Full stop after ‘diet’.
“What’s going on? What’s…”
Question mark after ‘means’ and exclamation mark after ‘grounded’.
-Exiting flash back
Try to ensure the characters are doing different animations when you change scenes.
“And it’s summer vacation anyway!”
-Scene with vendor
Full stop after ‘late’. Exclamation after I’M LATE!’. Full stop after ‘decide’, ‘hard’ and ‘gross’.
“Apple juice coffee? Anyone? P-please?”
Izzy was facing the wrong direction when looking at the vendor.
Full stop after ’ then’ and ‘geez’. 'Let’s should be ‘let’s’ and full after ‘quiet’.
-Park
"So, what do we do? (Text animation)
Full stop after ‘question’.
“Sure, what is it?”
Comma after ‘poor’ and full stop after ‘Duh’. No comma after ‘all’. Full stop after ‘man’.
“Anyway, tommorrow we can look up places that are hiring. Then we can write them down and the day after we go to each to ask for an interview or whatever.”
“If we cross out the jobs we’ve already gone to, we can keep track.”
- While Kiyance is saying all of this, you can have Izzy do different animations.
“You can work the next day at the places you got accepted.”
- Oh brother! Izzy personality is what I hope my child doesn’t have. Kiyance makes it all sound so simple lol.
After ‘sooo’ put four dots.
‘Depends’ should be ‘depends’. Full stop after ‘want’ and ‘money’.
“Thanks for helping, man. I’ll meet you here tomorrow then?”
‘See’ should be ‘see’ and full stop after ‘tommorrow’.
“For all I know”
Question mark after ‘know’.
“Ugh, let’s just watch some random videos.”
Full stop after ‘first’.
“What should I watch?”
Full stop after ‘stop’ and ‘out’.
In the second choice, ‘i’ should be ‘I’.
These videos are ridiculous
"Oh my God, ouch that hurts. Full stop after ‘embarrassing’.
- I would love to see more of Izzy’s face. The glasses need to go
if not for the entire time. Why is she still in the same clothes the next day?
“Alright, let’s get dressed.”
“Ugh, I’m being so dramatic.”
-I can’t tell which makes me wonder if she is self-centered.
-Author’s notes
‘Thanks’ should be ‘thanks’. No comma after ‘boring’ and ’ But’ should be ‘but’. ‘i’ should be ‘I’. Full stop after ‘introduction’ and ‘chapter’.
’ It’s should be ‘it’s’ and full stop after ‘interesting’.
“I’ll let you go now.”
- You have 2 ‘to be continued’.
Overview:
I like the first episode. The intro is very vague but your cover and title basically gives readers and idea of what it will be about. I can’t wait to see how it turns out. Just work on the things I highlighted and suggest using different words which mean the same thing instead of using the same word numerous times. It kind of threw me off a bit 
. The bubble positions are great and I really like Izzy’s and relationship with her friend. It is quiet peculiar 
.
I think the intro is actually an episode itself. I felt like I was getting into the story when she went to change her clothes but then you cut off and went to episode 2 
. I will try to live with it though. Oooh I loved the idea of smart car and house.
Thank you to @Mint-Episode for this review.
OreoBiscuit's Review
Izzy has a job
Episode 1 summary:
Somewhere in the episode, you wrote “Oh boy was i wrong” when it should’ve been Oh boy was I wrong".
During the phone call between the Izzy and her friend a few of the sentences used a mixture of capital letters in the middle of sentences and one part of the conversation did not make sense. You wrote *“Depends on you, But anyways, I think your Mom Isn’t gonna give you weekly weekly allowance anymore” it would be better to write it out as “Depends on you, b ut I don’t think your m om is going to give you anymore weekly allowance.”
In the scene where we first see the mum, there is a choice asking if we want to play the flashback. I’m not sure if you did to add humour into the scene, but adding a choice where we do not even have the choice to pick the other option as we’re still forced to pick the first choice and watch the flashback doesn’t really seem necessary and kind of just takes the humour away (maybe it’s just me idk).
During the flashback scene, the mum is wearing the same clothes as she is in the present. Unless you have a reason which is unknown to the readers, it’ll be better to have her wear different clothes to make it seem more realistic. If there is a reason, maybe you could kind of show us the reason without getting too sidetracked.
In the next scene where Izzy meets up with her friend, when Izzy and the friend do the idle_rear animation to look at the worker behind them, Izzy is facing the wrong way. To get her facing the right way, Izzy needed to be facing left and doing the idle_rear animation.
The episode ended very randomly. Again it may have been to add humour to the ending but it just didn’t really make sense to me.
Episode 2 summary:
A warning to show that the story uses strong language at the beginning would’ve been a good way to start the episode. I personally don’t mind swearing in stories, but quite a few readers find it a little uncomfortable. You could check the different warning backgrounds in the background section on the side of the script somewhere and find the warning background most suitable for the situation.
In the graveyard ‘job interview’, Aztro and the man standing next to her pop up onto the screen when it cuts/pans to the zone that they’re standing in. To avoid that, maybe you could have them already standing in the zone when Izzy and her friend are also standing in the zone or use the & command.
Episode 3 summary:
All I can say really, is ???
The entire episode just seemed extremely random with not much of a plot and it ended so suddenly too.
The different movies Izzy watched before bed were quite funny though, I liked the comedy movie one haha.
Overall summary:
Although you mentioned episode 1 being more as in introduction than a story, I feel as if little to no introducing was done. I understand who each character were but I didn’t really get what their personalities are like or their roles in the story (except for the worker guy lol). The episode felt like a really short story that was rushed to get to the next episode. I feel as though there is not much of a storyline. Yes Izzy is getting a job or jobs, but there’s really nothing else going on. Each episode is extremely short and remember people like to judge a story from the first episode. If they find it too short or find that there isn’t much going on in the episode, they are more likely to stop reading from there. An introduction episode can still be interesting when introducing and showing the characters well. The directing can be improved however, it’s a good start and try to refrain from using capital letters in the middle of sentences.
Thank you to @OreoBiscuit for this review.