Review for the story The Society (of Haverford) by @selvinachen61 
Annieways' Review
The Society (of Haverford) review
First impression
I like the covers and the premise of the story, I’m interested to see how this works out. There is a typo in the description, it should be “What happen s ”
Characters
I… I don’t really like Juliette, is that a bad thing? 
Wow, later I found out that she was not the actual MC of the story, and I’m playing as Andy. You surprised me, in a good way.
Romeo seems cool, I kinda wish he was my love interest and not Juliette’s lol. Or is he? 
Plot
I think the narrations at the beginning were too long, and I’m not sure I would normally continue reading after the first chapter because of this. I would maybe consider to add a few dialogue lines in between to make it more interesting.
Also, the ending of the first chapter was a little random. Instead of asking the “What will happen” questions, maybe you could try add another scene(s) that make the reader ask these questions to themselves?
The next chapters were much more interesting to me, because they were focused on the dialogues, and you used narrations mainly in flashbacks, which I think is a nice way of using them.
Directing
Overall, I liked your directing but I have to point out quite a few things:
- In the first chapter Lexi keeps talking when it’s Juliette’s dialogue, and since she’s the one in the foreground and Juliette is in the background, it’s pretty distracting. Put Lexi into an idle animation and maybe zoom on Juliette when she is the one talking.
- You have characters talking without animations. It happens only a few times, but almost in every scene, so make sure to add animation to every dialogue line, it will look much better.
- I liked that you combined the cinematic style with Spotlight. I felt that using Spotlight was a nice and clever way to add the phone conversations.
- There are layering issues in the campus scene with Juliette and the girls in episode 2.
- In episode 3, Andy looks too small when she wakes up in bed, you will need to scale her bigger.
- After the flashback scene in episode 3, I think you cut to the wrong zone because I can’t see the characters. Also, you forgot to reset the filter.
- The boys are popping up on screen one by one at the Blue Eagle’s meeting. Use & instead of @ when placing the characters.
Author notes
I think your author intro in episode 1 was too long. I would suggest you to try shortening it, because some readers might get bored and click out before the story even starts. Explaining the character points is good, but saying things like your directing will get better is not necessary.
Overall
I love the idea, especially that you are trying to approach it in a comedic way. I enjoyed reading it, but mostly from episode 2, so I would suggest again to reduce the narration and add more dialogue lines in episode 1 to make it more interesting.
Thank you to @Annieways for this review.