Our Reviews for the story Mum Knows Best by @BEEBS07 
Annieways' Review
First impression
Your covers are pretty unique and after reading the story I think they represent it well. The description is fitting too, I would just suggest you to capitalize the MC’s name.
Characters
I usually don’t like weak female characters, but I completely understand why you made the MC the way you did. However, I would have expected her to at least doubt a few things or to be angry sometimes, which didn’t really happen. I felt like she just accepts the victim role, but I hope she will ask for some help or stand up for herself in the later chapters. I think you portrayed the mum pretty well.
Plot
Your story can be triggering for many readers, but I see that you put enough warnings in the beginning, which is good.
I must say I was confused with the plot several times and I was hoping you would try to raise awareness on mental illnesses as it is suggested on the loading screen, but after reading the first 3 chapters, I still didn’t see it, unfortunately. Again, it’s possible that I would understand it better in the later chapters, but to be honest readers won’t continue your story if they don’t see where it is going, and you have to draw their attention in the very first episodes.
Grammar
I noticed several grammar issues throughout the whole story. Since English is not my first language, I won’t try to correct them, but I suggest you to reread your story and get a proofreader. Some sentences didn’t even make sense to me and punctuation is also missing almost everywhere, which is an instant turn-off for many readers. I also noticed that some words were capitalized in the middle of the sentence, which is not needed, however in many cases ’I’ wasn’t.
Directing
Your intro is creative, and although I must admit I don’t like the theme, it fits the story.
You should check out your camera zooming, there are quite a few issues with it already in the first scene. For instance, the MC’s face cannot be seen in the whole scene, and although it’s possible this was intentional, it looks odd.
In many cases I would suggest you to use & instead of @, because that would make your directing much smoother, and would prevent your characters from popping up on screen, which happened a few times.
Your spot directing needs some work too. When there are more characters on screen, some of them are not placed correctly, and it can be seen when the characters walk in screen from the wrong place and sometimes instead of walking, they just jump from one spot to another.
I like that you used flashbacks instead of just telling what happened in the past, but it would look better if you used transitions like iris in and out.
I usually don’t mind stories without music, but I feel like it might be a good idea to add some music here to set the mood.
Overall
I think you have quite a few things to improve on, but first of all I would suggest you to focus on the MC’s personality. I know that the theme you choose is pretty heavy, but I think if we understood the MC’s feelings, intentions and thoughts better, this story would be more interesting to read.
Thank you to @Annieways for this review.
Epy.bhaddie's Review
Cc: Limited but I don’t think there should be CC it’s so limited limited like 
I can’t even customize the character the noses are limited and everything else (tHO I don’t mind) it just doesn’t feel necessary.
Sound: This story especially I feel like needs sound so that it can help others know if it’s a sad scene happy scene or whatever
Intro: So the puppet intro… Idk if that should be added in there like I see no need for it. I don’t think it’s necessary because it just ends really abruptly.
Spelling and grammar errors: I saw one the second I started reading when it said
*Hi, it’s me I`m not sure I can do this, what if I cannot handle it?, am really scared…really scared.
Instead she should say,
Hey it’s me, I’m not sure I can do this, I’m feeling really nervous right now and I don’t know what to do.
Ok so what I gathered so far is that there’s many words we may not have known about such as “fags” and it would be annoying to search it up so having a reader message telling us what it’s about would be amazing!!
So there’s many spelling errors and grammatical errors, such as having no commas. So I recommend using Grammarly when writing it’s really helpful 
There are a few speech bubble errors like the bubbles would either be not where the character is or it’s covering the face. I suggest coding the speech bubble every time when writing dialogue.
I think it would be a huge help to use & with @ to not have characters appearing a second late or overall have things go smooth and it’ll make your story neat.
please do add music it would make your story so much better and more dramatic and add effect to the storyline!
Thank you to @xetic for this review.
JemU776's Review
Episode 1 Review:
I did notice a lot of errors though-I’m or I am (I’m is more common), not am. Sentences need periods. In the beginning, the d in description was capitalized. It should not have been.
“reading the Description of the story” is not right. Instead “reading the description of the story”
Three dots instead of two. ex “taken lightly…”
“So, if you have agreed to the following statement, then first things first… instructions .”
it’s (it +is) instead of its in some instances
“I guess this is the best that I’m gonna get.”
The m in mother should not be capitalized.
didn’t (did +not) instead of didnt
When asking a question, a question mark needs to go at the end of the sentence.
I’ll, not Ill
“Come on, please pick up.”
I saw ?, together. This wouldn’t make sense.
“I’ll see ya later.” the s in see shouldn’t be capitalized
“No, nothing at all.” <-a comma and period needs to go here.
Define what teething problems are. Do you mean the baby crying or something?
“I’ll turn you into a fairy princess.” add the will to this, since I alone sounds very awkward.
There were a lot of errors 
“Nicola, what have I told you about coming near me when I’m smoking?”
“We don’t want to have to take you to the hospital if you have an asthma attack.” (you wrote your here when it should have been you’re)
If I was Nicola, I’d run away.
“You’re such a disappointment to me.” You are, not your.
I chose the option “I already cleaned up the room, I’m not doing it again.” There’s no way I’m cleaning a room again, even if I’m not doing actual physical work and it’s just an episode story.
i needs to be capitalized. I, not i
Some sentences didn’t make sense.
The accident part made me kinda sad : /
Nicola: I suppose I better take a bath.
visits, not vistes
Some of the sentences need to be re-worked as they don’t make sense however the episode did evoke a lot of emotions. I will be updating this post as I finish chapter 1 (or replying to it).
Remaining chapter 1 review and chapters 2 and 3 review:
“My sister Lacey and I” instead of "me and my sister lacey”
BEEBS shouldn’t be capitalized.
Commas were missing throughout some sentences.
“Well, that was a trip down memory lane.” <- add the a in this otherwise it sounds sort of awkward.
“My family wasn’t the best” <- remove the it in front of family, also I think isn’t would be better to use instead of wasn’t .
In some instances, when you wrote “ was ” it should have been “ were ” instead.
“we were always together” instead of “we was always together”
“Lacy? Mama? Dad?” The d in dad should be capitalized.
Unknown: I’m always here. ( I’m instead of Am )
“Why does mum love you more than me?!” <- the m in mum should not be capitalized.
“You can run but you can’t hide.” <- better to write it this way.
Better to break up all of this below and write it like this:
This is your fault.”
“Everything is your fault.”
“You’re the youngest and she’s probably going to cut all of your hair off, too.”
I noticed something about the hair she was crying about…
It is shaggy long hair-the bed head hair! That’s like one of my most favorite hairstyles in INK, oh my 
Nicola: “No, I don’t want short hair!” To be fair, young Nicola has short hair while she’s saying this. Her hair is the same size as the one Kristen is complaining about. Maybe make a duplicate Kristen and make her bald instead? Just a thought.
Also, for young Nicola or anyone else who has young in their display name, I recommend for you to go to characters and for young Nicola, where it says display name, erase YOUNG, so that it’s just NICOLA.
“You’re gonna be next!” <- you are instead of your .
Also, where it says gunna, it should be gonna . Gonna comes from going to , however it’s fine to write and is used in informal English speech, I believe.
The Happy 18 birthday scene with the balloons looked so cool although everyone at the party looked like kids when they were adults. Maybe spot direct them a little taller?
The loading screen is really awesome although I recommend you re-upload it by fixing the “Mum Know’s Best” to “Mum Knows Best”
You added a period in some places where there shouldn’t have been a period.
“from an early age she has been told it’s normal” <- it is instead of its
“because she finds it as a way of comforting herself.” <- findsones isn’t a word
The one coin to start scene is pretty interesting.
Nicola: I wanna do something different with my hair today. <- the d in do shouldn’t be capitalized.
Lynne: “Don’t make me laugh” <- don’t instead of dont
Break down the following sentences into two separate speechbubbles and correct them:
Nicola: It’s really hot today, mum.
Nicola: That’s why I’m wearing it.
I really don’t know why but I have this strong dislike for that Halliee character.
When Nicola is talking to Martyn, the speechbubble is coming out of his mouth. I recommend fixing that by playing around with the speechbubble command. Can read more here: 
HOW TO: Spot direct Speech Bubble
When you’re doing the Great Gatsby quiz, I recommend timing the choices to add some spice.
Ugh, I really hate that Mariah girl, can’t believe she burnt Nicola a little with her cigarette : (
Nicola: Sorr y, I didn’t realize you were in here. <- were instead of was and remember to add a comma .
When Mariah asks about the eating disorder, the speechbubble is coming out of Nicola’s mouth. I recommend fixing that.
The cutting part made me pretty sad.
You’re a weirdo. <-it should be you’re (you + are) instead of your
“You think you’re so perfect” <- much better to write this.
Lynne Young should be Young Lynne unless Young is her last name and that’s what you meant. But as I already mentioned, just change the display name to Lynne only.
“apologized” <- it is spelled like this.
“But I wasn’t feeling very well, anyways.” <- better to write this for Nicola.
“Just don’t get me sick or else I’ll slap you.” Wow, this was a very interesting and funny line.
When you use the nickname Hay for her friend, the h in hay should be capitalized.
Oh ha ha, omg “I feel so bad because as soon as he saw Halliee, he ran a mile. DO NOT LAUGH.” <- this part was very funny.
When Halliee and Nicola are talking near the fountain, there are many grammatical errors present in their sentences.
Halliee: Was it something I sai d? <- much better to write this
Nicola: I’m gonna keep playing Episode. <- write it this way instead.
OK, overall, from what I read, I can say that it was interesting however I’d recommend a proof-reader to help you with your story and I recommend fixing some directing errors in your story as well. Great job 
Thank you to @JemU776 for this review.
Kimballet's Review
First off, congratulations for writing and coding 28 chapters. That is an amazing accomplishment.
Grammar
However, there were a lot of things I think that could be improved. Largely, punctuation and grammar were off. I think other reviewers may give you a play by play of so I won’t go in to detail but in general, periods are needed at the ends of sentences and only the beginning (or proper nouns like names, days, countries) should be capitalized. Also I think you are using the wrong character for apostrophes (‘). Make sure they are facing the right way.
Story
I appreciated the warnings for the story because it is definitely a potentially triggering story.
However, I think there were too many author’s notes (as Narration) in the story. Let your story show things, not tell us too much.
Also, i think you may need to re-work the order and length of your chapters. For example, I think showing the normal mom and kid scene was illustrative of what “normal” looks like but it went on a bit long since they are not main characters. Also they are not needed after you reveal that they were not the main characters.
Also, the introduction of the rest of the family is a bit unclear. I’d rather be shown that Kristen is a “bad” sister, not told. Also it can just be a flashback, it doesn’t have to be because Nicola was looking at pictures since that seemed a bit contrived.
In general, the first chapter did not flow and the events were jumbled. I know that was on purpose with flashbacks and present day mixed but it’s not in the right order to make sense. It is confusing and not engaging enough to make the reader want to continue.
I’d recommend reading and watching other media with complicated, abusive mothers like White Oleander and Sharp Objects. I think (at least the beginning of your story) is a lot of abuse but I’m not really sure where the story was going. I’d suggest speeding it up by taking out unnecessary narration and scenes.
Overall, it’s a great start and congratulations on finishing your story! I’d suggest revamping it a little bit, but I can tell how much effort went into the story with the animations and directing.
Thank you to @kimballet for this review.
Lex2's Review
The intro of the story was really creative and fun to watch, but I also noticed a lot of grammar and spelling issues from the start. This was something that was consistent throughout all 3 of the episodes I completed, I would advise you to get someone proofread and help you with the grammar aspect of it.
I liked the fact that you were creative with making a new body type using the pregnancy attire. Your directing was great considering this is your first story. The story itself was honestly confusing and most of the scenes were sporadic. I think that you may have rushed through it because it has a lot of holes in the plot. For example, the stairs scene had me completely lost! Why wouldn’t he let her pass? Was he abusive? Who was he, and most importantly, why did she feel the need to tell her daughter that story? There were a lot of things that she shouldn’t have been discussing with her daughter. It could’ve went smoother if you would’ve showed the Mother’s point of view and her thoughts as well.
Thank you to @Lex2 for this review.
OreoBiscuit's Review
Episode 1 summary :
A few sentences did not make any sense as incorrect words were used an some words were written in the wrong tense. In the 1st scene, there was a really long pause where the MC was not doing any animation.
In the park scene, the speechbubbles was not facing the correct character (the nice mum) when she was speaking.
A lot of the @ commands were used where &'s could’ve been used which would’ve helped make the story move at a better pace instead of having to wait for the screen to zoom in at a slow speed before the story continued.
There were layering issues in the 18th birthday scene. For instance when the young MC moved to where her mum was standing, her layering should’ve changed into a number which was lower than those who were now standing in front of her.
The loading screen at the end of the episode doesn’t really serve any purpose.
Episode 2 summary :
There were more grammar mistakes
The first teacher’s name was literally BGwoman# (# meaning a number)
The bathroom didn’t make any sense. Although there were trigger warnings at the beginning of episode 1, I believe that you still could’ve given a warning before the girl who was smoking in the toilet started speaking as she mentioned a lot of topics that would trigger a lot of readers.
In that same scene, the MC ends up falling which didn’t make any sense. Did she trip or did she just randomly fall so that you could give us another flashback?
Please just end the episode instead of adding the loading screen. The image can be triggering for others and making us sit and wait for the screen to load whilst looking at the image only for the episode to end just seems really unnecessary. Especially as we see that same loading screen at the beginning of every episode.
Episode 3 summary :
There were still issues with grammar. The long pause when picking the choice to skip the episode or read it didn’t have to be so long especially as right after the long pause, you ask the same question again.
The episode ended a bit randomly.
Overall summary:
Every episode had grammar mistakes and the wrong words were used such as ‘am’ when it should’ve been ‘I’m’. The intro was creative however, that was the only positive thing throughout the whole 3 episodes. A good intro is good however, a well written story is better as it is what the reader is reading. This story mentions it being about awareness however no awareness was given through the episodes. What would be good is to maybe give encouraging quotes and maybe any advice to spread awareness and give a little info on where help can be found? There were a lot of flashbacks that just came out of nowhere in the story. Yes telling us that this is a flashback is okay but if it is not really having relevance to the scene, it doesn’t really need to be there. There story was at a decent length and there were choices which a lot of readers enjoy.
Thank you to @OreoBiscuit for this review.
Shona4b's Review
Overall Comment-
As the story starts, the use of overlays for intro was really good, efforts can be seen throughout on overlays and directions coding. Though there are few places where the spot direction could have been better. The narration was done nicely but there were many grammatical errors in the dialogues and narratives. There are a lot of scope for corrections and story can be more interactive with few efforts on grammar and a little on direction.
Thank you to @Shona4b for this review.
Simila100's Review
- Almost immediately into the story, the intro took a while, so I was a little confused if it was going to continue or not. I’d suggest making it a bit shorter.
- I don’t think it’s necessary to say you knew that readers like CC. Although that’s entirely up to you.
- No punctuation at the ends of ALL sentences. This severely puts me off.
- Same problem with the “ams” and “I’m” wording choice as everyone elses’ reviews.
- 1 coin to insert? Alright, I’m really sorry but I just don’t understand the point of the intro, although it’s unique.
- In the playground scene, it’s a little weird how the mom says she’ll eat the toes of the daughter.
- It’d definitely help to use & with @ to help everything go smoother.
- I couldn’t finish after the 5 fags part.
- It’d be nice to have some music here and there.
OVERALL RATING: 2.5/10
Thank you to @Simila100 for this review.
xxLoveAaliyah's Review
Mum Knows Best
Episode 1
Grammar mistakes:
- Right off the bat. I can see that you mistake Am for I’m. The difference between the two are: I’m is the contraction of “I am”, whereas am is simply the verb with no pronoun before it. How to use each words in a sentence: “ I’m going to write a story today.” “ Am I really afraid?”
- Nicola says after CC “Thanks for helping create me! I guess this is the best am gunna get.” Hm. You have two spelling errors. Correct this to “Thanks for the with creating me! I guess this the best I’m going to get.” If you’re using ebonics/slang for “gunna” then carry on.
- “1 coin to start.” Numbers under 100 should be spelled out. So, fix that “One coin to start.” However, it’s your prerogative.
- You’re missing punctuation at the end of your sentences. Keep in mind that punctuation is important. Not only does it looks professional, but it makes your sentences complete.
- You say “Before you carry on reading please be aware this” This should be “Before you carry on with reading, please be aware this -“ A dash will let us know that your sentence will carry on.
- You say “Also I would like to add that if you think this is the definition of the story then am sorry to say your reading the wrong story.” Try this instead: “ Also, I would like to add that if you think this is the definition of a perfect family type story then I’m sorry to say that you’re reading the wrong story.”
- Worker says “Here you go, if you fill them out then Ill look it up.” You need to add an apostrophe to “ I’ll. ”
- Worker says “No not at all” This needs to be “No. Not at all.”
- You spelled “decribe” It’s spelled ”describe. ”
- Mother says “Love you too baby” This needs to be “Love you too, baby.”
- In the park scene. The mother’s speech tail isn’t on her. You need to spot the speech-bubble tail on the right.
- You spelled “beutful” This needs to be “beautiful” You spelled “braclet” this needs to be “bracelet”
- It’s means it is.
Directing errors and feedback:
- For the certain scene. Your overlay glitches. I would advise you to use the & instead of the @ symbol.
- In the office scene you have too much panning. I would advise that you use @zoom on [spot] to % in [time] Replace the & with the @ symbol.
- The overlay needs to be a bit bigger or the worker needs to be smaller. You can see her feet hanging out at the bottom.
Thank you to @LiyahxWrites for this review.