My first impression of the story was that it was really weird. There were many characters introduced at once and the humor was really strange. On a good note, all the characters had their one unique personalities and seemed normal, down to earth, like normal human beings. The directing wasn’t flawless but it was still very good; the sounds, music and animations fitted the story so well. The intro was perfect for this story.
I give the directing 8/10. It was great, nothing to complain about. You used zooms, spot directing, overlays, sound and all that really well. Not all the overlays had a superb quality and the characters weren’t always placed perfectly on the millimeter, so if you want to achieve perfection there’s room for it but nothing necessary.
Plot Development 9/10
The plot had a nice flow, I liked the pace. It wasn’t too slow and we got to see how the relationships between the characters evolved. Sometimes it went a little fast. For example, the mean girl started to understand the underlying reasons behind her behavior in just a couple of scenes. The last chapters also jumped forward in time pretty quickly. Although, that was something that I didn’t mind at all.
Character Development 10/10
What really made the story great was its characters. They all had their own personalities and were consistent with their actions. Both Benio and Rosie got better at expressing their thoughts and I got the impression that all of the characters matured over time. A nice touch was that they also started to dress differently which is pretty realistic.
This story was funny and creative. I would recommend it to people who would like something lighthearted and fun to read. It’s a great reminder for people to stay true to themselves and to not be afraid to show their feelings and affection for others. Family and friends are so important if you want to stay happy and confident. Benio’s family set a great example.
Can’t forget to mention how creative this story was. I’ll end this review with the following: a living toilet that needs “food”.
Okaaay so it’s time for a third round. This turned out to be quite fun in spite of me being the only one reading the story.
I’m going to do a quick story poll with some stories I’ve been wanting to read for some time. Which should we read next?
All that Remains by @/writterren
One of the Girls by @/amberose
Bad Behavior by @/xxLoveAaliyah
African Dream by Charlie King
Yeah I know three of them are kind of my friends/known on the forums Sorry for offending anyone. I don’t know our relationship statuses yet so better go safe hahaha . Appreciate and like all of these authors a lot though friends (Hahaha… stop overthinking this @fraud!)
Feel free to join in the reading or just hang out in this cult! I really enjoyed the conversations with @LiaLopez and @Annasilveroriginal in part 2 of the cult.
Bad Behavior by @LiyahxWrites got the most votes on the poll so that is the story to be read. We have one month It would be awesome if some of you could read it with me lol Else, feel free to look at the screenshots and if you’ve already read it I would like to hear your thoughts!
I’ve read the first chapter and it was a good introduction. Verrry relatable since I’m almost the same age and all that. The characters seems three dimensional and realistic with their own personalities. Like them! Look forward to some more action and to see what the story is all about
I’m so bad at reading on Episode… Read the second chapter today while waiting for my lecture to start. Although I was a bit paranoid that people would see that I played Episode
Okay, so Bad Behavior is really different from the last story, Benio, which I read. This is a lot more serious story that brings up several real life issues and depicts different relationships etc. I like these kinds of stories (if not even more, I couldn’t stand comedy and romance when I was younger, I can enjoy them now at least). I feel like this chapter still is introducing the “problem” and I wonder when it will start to get more eventful. The pace is good though, and keeps my interest. The characters and relationships are gold.
Some screenshots and comments
The splashes are beautiful! I’m blind and read waaay to slow to see what it stands (same with reader messages, I always miss them hahaha).
I guess a filter is used for this flashback? It looks cool You’re very aesthetical Aaliyah.
I agree with Alana. But this situation seems so common irl and it’s awful… Like, please say what you think and try to sort things out, don’t be a coward. (Yes I’m a hypocrit, I usually stay quiet about no matter what lol)
I didn’t expect this. I wonder what happened with the baby…
He’s an awesome friend and she seems like a strong character. Like it
I don’t understand what the iphone overlay is doing there lol. It’s in very high quality though
Omg, ah! You read my story I’m so embarrassed over the earlier chapters. In fact, the story needs a revamp. I don’t know what’s happening with the phone overlay But, I will fix that tomorrow. Thank you for the screenshots and reading.