Okay, thank you! 
Yes, I actually noticed that I use too much commas, but it’s because English isn’t my first language, and in my language you have to for example ALWAYS put comma before “that”, well synonym of it. 
I have fixed some of those, but those will update only after I publish next chapter. And there probably is still many left!
And there will be cliffhangers in some episodes in the future…
Well, I hope you read some more chapters, to get maybe more into the story… You have just met your first LI too! 
I think I have read 2 chapters of your story… I will read one more, and then send my feedback!