I read the first chapter of your story (I will read more because I liked it), this is your review:
Language
You do have fluent english, there is no mistake and the text is 100% clear and it isn’t too long or too short, although in chapter 1 we still didn’t get any proper conversation between two people
Grade: 8
Plot
It seems to be an intriguing story, especially mixing different genres. I love this particular theme of supernatural, I love the flashback… AMAZING
For now the plot seems clear but I’m afraid it might be, in the future, centered on the love interest. I hope and suggest the protagonist not to have only a relationship with the guy, but also deep friendships with her friends!
Amazing cliffhanger! Truly catchy and I think that was a perfect way to end a chapter
Grade: 9.5
Directing
You should teach me your skills! Your directing is stunning
Grade: 10
Creativity
It’s creative and 100% catchy but it looks slightly like a distorted version of the quite frequent fight between vampires and wolves, or bad and evil forces
Regardless, it is different.
Watch out: the whole magic theme might get confusing (for now it is perfectly clear, it is just a warning)
Grade: 8
Overall grade: 9/10
I look forward to reading more! And I would love to learn some of your directing skills. Let me know if you want me to review chapter 2 as well, I’ll read it soon either way