Thinking about using this scene in my story but unsure

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Alright, so I’m currently writing my story and in the middle to mid end of the story i have an idea that i would like to use. However, i fear that this may anger some readers and the scene heavily impacts the story line.

Here’s what I’m thinking:

The place is in a old abandoned castle, left uncared for since the 19th century. Your enemy was your friend, but turned out to be a fake. Now when i say fake i mean like the enemy is legitimately pretending to be someone else. Anyways, she manages to get both your love interests, holding a magic thread at their necks. A single yank to the thread is all it takes for your love interests to die.

You’re tired from fighting, barely holding on to any magic you have left in you. After the major spell you did to combat your enemy, all you have left is a small sliver of energy, just enough to free your love interests. But wait- there’s enough magic to free one of your love interests. Just one. The other is condemned to their fate.

“Save me, leave him to pheris! He’s much more knowledgeable about combat anyways!” -your first love intrest.

“No, don’t listen to him, he just wants me to die so that he can have no competition left, and he finally will have you.” -your second love intrest.

You’re undecided, confused and lost. Your brain is a mess, and your heart in tangles. The inability to pick the one whom you’ll save is causing you to panic.

“Why, can’t choose? Don’t worry, i can make your job easier by eliminating both your sweethearts!”-your enemy.

Your enemy pulls on the thread ever so gently, yet made your love intrests groan in unbearable pain.

“I can’t choose! But i can’t let either one die!”-you.

Here comes the choice. If you pick either one, say you pick the second love intrest, the first one will get saved by your friends. He’ll live, but get mad at you for not picking him.

Each love intrest reacts differently to the situation at hand. So if you pick the second one, you’ll gain 8 points, but lose 8 points with the other love intrest.

And their relationship will be affected by this choice.

Is this a good scene to put in the story? Please let me know.

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I really like that idea! It makes the reader being able to really choose their path in the story. :slight_smile:

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Ngl, there are going to be some people who are going to be pissed at that (I’m actually totally fine with it :upside_down_face:). Maybe the other dude (Or girl) is not going to die, but something like marry the enemy?

If the enemy is a guy (and if nobody likes the same gender), then he\she would be left later but probably not see you again (Considering you just left them for someone else)

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The enemy is a girl, and well, I’m not planning for the enemy to marry the other love intrest since she’s gonna die anyways-

But maybe the love intrest that is not picked holds a grudge against the MC and eventually the grudge goes away once the love intrest realises that MC has finally made her choice? And they stayed friends?

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Thank you! That really helps me in deciding.

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Yes that would be awesome! (I’m kind of weird in imagining endings :sweat_smile:)

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Yea I’ll do that, my story is kinda all over the place right now, like i have major scenes but just don’t know which order to put them in for the whole story to make sense lol

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