This will be a great help to me <3

I have just made some important changes to the first chapter of my story and I would really love, if one og two of you would read the chapter and tell me what you think.

I would like to know if, this first chapter make people curious want to read the next chapter.

You’ll find the story here:



looks cool, but you misspelled “its”

sorry, not to come off as a pain or a grammar nazi, but “it’s” means “it is”

surely you don’t mean “has it is own secrets”

sorry lol

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Thank you so much!
I can’t believe, that my first mistake is in the titel! :joy:

xxxx its ok luv <33