Hey guys !
I’m currently writing a Mafia story called ‘The Rosiria Twins’ & I would love some feedback on it ! I am also doing a lot of research on this story, to make sure that it is as realistic as possible, and also to make sure that it is portrayed correctly.
You and your twin are both heirs to the Mexican Mafia, but only one will descend to the throne. To decide who gets to be boss, your both assigned a mission… get rid of the heir to the Italian Mafia - Emilio Acerbi. Who will be victorious? You, your twin, or Emilio?
help with wording the description - @thewritingtomato
i would love some feedback & ideas on my story ! There are a lot of plot twists & surprises along the road of my story ! also i would love it if you guys would lmk if you would consider reading my story ! :))
i would definitely read this! A lot of people say that mafia stories are overrated and been done too many times, but i love them! as long as they are acc well written.
My biggest tip would be to make your characters (the twins+ any other main characters) really unique and relatable. By this i mean making them have weaknesses, goals, hobbies. Just really plan out your characters don’t just make them ohh i’m in a mafia don’t mess with me i’ll mess you up mate rahhhh you feel me?
But yes i would read it, lemme know if you need anyone to proof read or bounce ideas off of!
Best of luck
omg thank uu ! & yes i will definitely make them unique with their weaknesses, goals, hobbies, & etc.
thank you !
I like them but there are some things that turn me off completelh.
First when the guy is like u can talk with no one and then he is like Imm sorry but I’m a bit overprotective bc this world is really hard and blah blah blah, I get that they have to be mafia and they’re not gonna be that tender but I mean she must learn about self defense and stuff. Also I kind of prefer them when they don’t see the MC and they are like wow I don’t know what it is but I like her, I like it is when it’s gradual and when they already have a relationship and they know about each other. But this id just my opinion, Im surr you’re story will be amazing
Yea I totally get this! I just wanted to let you know that the MC & Emilio will not end up becoming a couple, but there will be a lot more romance in book 2 !
thanks & yea, at first i wanted them to fall in love haha, but then i changed my mind since there’s literally NO WAY that they would end up falling in love
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