I hope that I’m in the right category this time.
So, I’m still writing my first story and I’d like everyone’s opinion/suggestions/critics on it.
My long a*s story plot (for now) (DO NOT STEAL)
Hermione (Korean-American MC) moved to LA starting her new life there because her grandma (her only caregiver) who raised her had passed away. Her mother in LA then contacted her out of the blue (she never contacted her before, there’s a reason behind it.) after she knew the sad news, and suggested her to move to LA with her. After moving, she then realized that she had twin brothers (her father died mysteriously long ago.) and her family is richer than she expected. She also had to attend college since she still need to finish her studies.
She met 7 friends along the way, and one of them is a magician (erm, like she does tarot reading and stuff? But she’s not a fortune teller lol.) After a few days later, Hermione has random “hallucinations” (she claimed to be.) after she met some events and went to seek medical help. Her magician friend helps her to do some tarot readings to calm her down. They received a message from the readings, telling her (Hermione) to find them. Because Kiara’s (l named the magician friend Kiara lol) magic is not strong enough to take her to find them, so she took Hermione to her cousin, which his magic is stronger than Kiara’s. The cousin then sent Hermione to “another world” (similar to a realm) and let her find the owner of the message since they only want to meet Hermione. She then encounters her own shadow (her past self) and found out that the random “hallucinations” were her long lost memories, and some of them were linked to her father’s mysterious death and why does her mother never contacted her before. Hermione is able to choose whether to obtain back the past memories, to know what had happened in the past or not to know it, and live without it.
There is romance in this story, but I want to focus more on the story plot. I have 3 love interests for Hermione, 2 boys and 1 girl.
Here's a cute image to save your eyes from reading my long story plot, thank me later.
HE’S TOO CUTE OMG-
So, what do you guys think?
Honestly I haven’t thought the title for this story yet
- Sounds good! (I’d like to hear your opinion!)
- This is bad… (Please give me some honest feedback on how to improve the plot!)
- I have a suggestion! (Comment down below!)