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Rules

1. You have to be considerate of me taking some time to get your review done because this time around I’m going to give very detailed reviews.

2. Please do not throw a fit! I give really honest reviews and if you know you can’t handle that. Leave now, because I don’t have time for the drama!

3. After I’m done with your review, I would like a “Thank You” because I didn’t have to do this.

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  • The waiting time will be 3-6 days because be mindful I have a life, some of you people forget that. Depending on how many chapters you want me to read the time will change. Also, I have online reviews I still have to do, so also be mindful of that!

  • Plus, I have school starting August 19th so it will take me longer due to school reasons

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  • Transitions

  • Grammar

  • The Plot Overall

  • Spot Directing

  • And More

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1. @Soul_Babies

2. @aprilish

3. @Innocence

4. @cece.mason

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6. @Biiblaiia

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I would love for you to read mine and share your thoughts but I’m still working on my story :sweat_smile:

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I can also do unpublished.

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That would be awesome but again I have very little at the moment. I’ll let you know when I’ll have something you can judge. :heart:

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Hey, would you be willing to give my story a review?

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Yeah.

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I’ll send you the link and the description

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Title: Torn Apart LL
Author: SRS
Genre: Romance/Drama
Style: Limelight
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6092006102466560
Summary: You lost faith in love years ago, but then you meet a mysterious stranger through a coffee spill. Will he be able to capture your heart, or will he break you even more?
Chapters: 4 Published (More to come)
Instagram: @episode_writersrs
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Credit to @WolfyLover247 I think this will be the last time I keep tagging you, you must be so annoyed. Sorry!

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Hey there, I would some feedback on my story!
Title: To deserve love…
Author: Pauline M.
Genre: Drama/Romance
Style: Limelight
No. of episodes: 7 (ongoing)
Description: A hopeless romantic and a girl who doesn’t believe in love, one night and everything changes. Being closer than what he imagines all that is left for the girl is… to run.
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6427977215705088
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Hey I would be very greatfull if you could review my story!!
My story:-AW:Imprinted
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About:-In a world were Vampires and Werewolves are in an eternal war, But they have a mutual enemy, The witches. What happens when a wolf imprint’s on one?
Link:-http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6475926547529728

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Hi! I’d love if you could review mine aswell :sweat_smile:
Author : Wolfylover247
Title : A Banshee
Genre : Fantasy
Style : INK
Description : Carmen is a banshee. A Banshee isn’t supposed to Love, but what destruction will Love between a human And a banshee cause? Pain, despair And danger awaits Carmen. -Choices matter-
Link : http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5569770706763776
Also, it has only 3 Episodes, but it’s completed. And it’s suitable for mature readers. Don’t read it if you can’t take a sad ending…
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Here’s my story😀
Name: Better Than Ever
Author: Miranda
Episodes: 9 (more coming soon)
Genre: Drama
CC: Yes
Plot: You’re a teenage girl with a lot of secrets. What happens when you start looking for your parents killer? Will Derek change you? Your killer may be closer than you think…

Thank you so much in advance!

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Hi there, thank you for making this thread!
I’d love if you’d give my story a shot. Here are the details:

Title: Sidereal
Author: aprilish
Genre: Fantasy/Romance
Style: Limelight
Blurb: An unlikely turn of events brings Dahlia from outer space to outside Felix’s window. Join them on their star-crossed journey as they cherish the wonders of being worlds apart.
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5063859204587520

The covers~

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Thank you so much! :heartbeat:

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  • The narration about the dad, was really long to me.

  • There was a lot of narration, I didn’t really like it, it made me want to leave the story. Mainly because it was boring. To me, you had more narration than the plot.

  • You’re missing so much punctuation, I didn’t see you add it in one sentence. It drove me nuts! :grimacing:

  • In the intro the MC slid in, maybe fix that so she can walk.

  • They either got bigger or smaller as they exited.

  • You named a woman Woman1 I believe, you might want to fix that.

  • You used a lot of original Episode backgrounds, and I felt that’s what made your story lose creativity.

  • When you said follow @/WolfyLover247 on her insta. You didn’t state her username.

  • You didn’t have any background characters, to me that would have brought the story to life.

  • Her mom was wearing default clothing :grimacing:

  • You used the animation super_fast_run, but she was moving kinda slow.

  • I made my character black and my mom was white :grimacing: “Mom, are you sure we’re related?”

  • At one time, my best friend just popped up on the screen. Make sure to use the “&” command.

  • Also when the MC was “shopping”, the MC popped up also.

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  • I wasn’t interested at all. This may sound harsh, but the only thing that made me stay was the fact that I was reviewing your story.

  • Wow, I didn’t even get an apology thumbs down for that guy :-1: :joy:

  • I didn’t really like my character, maybe it was just her vibe :woman_shrugging:

  • I’m on Episode One, I have a feeling that guy I bumped into, is gonna be my boss at the interview.

  • I don’t really like authors talking in the beginning of a story.

First Impressions are everything!!

Second Episode

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  • My character said “She was tired”, please do the exhausted animation so it really shows she is tired.

  • This is my own pet peeve, but I don’t like it when the character goes to the other side of the room to change. It takes up to much time for me.

  • Laura was walking then just popped up into her spot.

  • For certain dialogue use different animations or otherwise it just doesn’t match.

  • Still no punctuation :grimacing:

  • So much default clothing!

  • While waiting for an interview, the girls that were sitting there we too big, I suggest making them smaller, so it looks normal

  • The desk in the Philadephia background moved back to its position, make sure to use the “&” command.

  • She was taller than Axel in the office scene than when she walked, she shrunk

  • Axel shrunk after walking away.

  • When she said “I take a cab” it’s “I took a cab”

  • When Aria got back home for the interview, everyone just popped into place.

  • The mom popped up again.

  • I wish the mom would change clothes, it’s a new day!

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  • I was right! That guy was going to be at the interview!

  • Wait-a-minute. He spilled coffee on me!! Now he is hot?

  • Your story was pretty predictable

  • He name is “Axel” Baddddd boooyyyy

  • He is the BOSS I already knew :smirk:

  • This is kinda cliche, I already know what is gonna happen.

  • Did he just pin me against a wall?!? Without my consent :joy:

  • I got the job NO WAY, he is probably gonna tease me and make out with me when I work there.

  • The author outro was kinda boring to me.

  • This story isn’t really entertaining me.

Third Episode

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  • Axel slid at the beginning of Episode 3.

  • Aria popped up when she was in her bedroom.

  • Laura hasn’t changed clothes.

  • The desk in the Philadephia background moved back to its position, make sure to use the “&” command.

  • The desk in the Philadephia background, you have a duplicate of those.

  • In Aria’s new office, her spot directing keep changing like a glitch, it was really annoying.

  • Aria popped up in her office.

  • Megan is wearing default clothing

  • When Megan asks her name she says “My names is Aria” it’s “My name is Aria”

  • The background ppl popped up in the break room.

  • Megan’s speech-bubble was off in the break room.

  • Tiffany’s speech-bubble was off, so was the narration bubble.

  • You can fix this command with (@speechbuuble reset)

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  • What is with this family and eating donuts? :joy:

  • The plot isn’t interesting me still.

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I’m starting your request.

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I would love a review! :nerd_face:
LINK: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6442211462152192

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@paumarr

  • At the end of the hallway scene, make sure to fade the music.

  • You forgot the punctuation when Rhea said “I need your help with something”

  • Kara just disappeared and came back when I pick “She’ll be fine in the ball scene”

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  • I love the intro and the use of overlays you had to go with it!

  • I love how you asked me, what device I was using and if I would like certain words censored.

  • I’m in love with the rewind thing!!

  • I loved how you introduced me into the best friend thing and you did the same with other ppl It was AMAZING!!!

  • Her clothes went missing in the fight…I love that :joy:

  • The creepy music in the school scene fit perfectly after she heard it was a poster :joy:

  • I just love how the story is going so far :joy:

  • Nice touch with the messages!

  • The zooms were soothing, most think it doesn’t matter, but I loved that.

  • Rhea has to be my friend in real life because I love that sneaky weird bish :heart:

  • Premium choices, I like it when “Choices Matter” :face_with_hand_over_mouth:

  • I noticed the diversity, love it BTW :wink:

  • The narration for when Kara was sneaking it had me pumped!

  • Was “Lee” peeing when I went to the men’s room? Because that dancing had me dead :joy:

  • Ohhhh… this sexy stranger holding Kara :heart:

  • Lee seriously needs to get tf out the bathroom :joy:

  • I really enjoyed the text effects!

  • THAT CLIFFHANGER?!? Why did you do me like that??? :sob:

Second Episode

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  • When Layla askes "The real question here is who are you? You had this instead "The real question here is who are * you *?

  • Conrad slid a little bit when he waved to say hello to the girls at the lunch table.

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  • I love how the security threw us out. Idk why :joy:

  • She RAN away?!?

  • I like how Kara threw the pillow at Rhea and then Rhea did it to Kara.

  • The background characters in the school hallway is an A+

  • He defended Kara hbfvdvdvbbfdnmvbdn :heart: :heart:

  • The spilt background was amazingly neat!

  • Loved how you described Jake “Thinks all girls want him” :joy:

  • I also really like how you have questions at the end.

  • This may seem small to you. But I appreciate how you changed the mom’s clothes in each flashback, most don’t do that.

Third Episode

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  • One a choice it says “Thow Rhea under the bus” it’s “Throw Rhea under the bus”

  • Kara said “Why did I have to skip History?” it should be “Why did I have to skip history?”

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  • I absolutely adore how she was mad and the zooms kept zooming on her with the cookie :joy:

  • That choking scene was directed perfectly.

  • Frank is mean af :joy: But that was funny

  • Frank kissed me!?! After that, I kicked him in the balls :wink:

  • Frank is a really good listener :+1:

  • Uhhh, he just went to being cocky again :joy:

  • Lyla is err… I don’t like her.

  • Kara just yelled at Rhea…uhhh… Rhea is my bestie!!

  • Great narrating with the photo scene!!

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Hi @AMagic I’d love a review for my story. Do you do unpublished stories as well?

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Yes, I do :smile:

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Thank you! What do you need exactly?

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