💕 Two Sentence Club (TEMP CLOSED) 💕

Our Mini Reviews for the story Reality Behind Glasses by @Tsukino_94 :icecream: :revolving_hearts:

_haruka's Review

The art scenes are really lovely, and the comedic moments with the MC are funny :joy: the only errors I really noticed are grammatical errors, so that could be worth looking over :blue_heart:

Thank you to @_haruka for this short review.

JemU776's Review

My Short Review for Reality Behind Glasses:

I really loved your directing, it was nice, cool points system and I adored the cliffhanger at the end where he finds out the new student is actually a girl (nice art scene by the way) but I found the first episode a little too fast, in my opinion, it’s so much to take in. Don’t make credits optional, play through them and when you’re using text effects, don’t let there be a space between the last word and the period (.)

for this, it kinda implies they were in that classroom for the whole entire day.

!!! instead of !!

P.S I might have went a little over but yeah good job and you should do something nice for your proof-reader if you haven’t already (like make her a gift) because dang, she did an amazing job :joy: :blob_hearts:

Thank you to @JemU776 for this short review.

MelanieyM's Review

My review:

I already read the first episode when it came out, and it was good. Just I feel as if the male was kinda strange… but he is just suspicious of her.

Thank you to @MelanieyM for this short review.

Misslea1's Review

My review of Reality Behind Glasses.

I love your plot, dialogues are interesting with that little pinch of comedy.
What I will recommend fixing is your spot directing in a few scenes because characters look a little bit big when looking at the background features. An example is the scene in the Library where Layla seeks rest on the couch. To me she looked a little too big to fit in that chair. Scale and reduce her size a little bit.

Ps. Directing overall was good :blush:

Thank you to @Misslea1 for this short review.

MissRuby's Review

The art scenes are stunning and I love how you portrayed the MC. I didn’t notice any directing errors so you did a great job! However, here are several grammatical errors so I suggest looking into that.

Thank you to @rubywrites for this short review.

Nessya's Review

I loved the funny moments between the MC and her kind of “stalker” LI. Amazing directing!

Just one speech bubble which covered Principal’s face a little when she bent over.

Thank you to @Nessya for this short review.

rachel.epii's Review

I absolutely love the idea of the plot and the way the 2 characters interact with each other.

I think, overall its great! It’s just a few grammar errors that need to be fixed.

Thank you to @rachel.epii for this short review.

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