I guess that’s a good sign for now 
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While I appreciate you commenting this is not how my club works 
Here’s an example:
As part of this club responses would be in a PM where I put it together (inspired by the Givers Club). Plus it is helpful to offer some feedback.
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Just a reminder, we are reviewing this story 
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Our Mini Reviews for the story Gold Leaf High by @MTB 
Misslea1's Review
My review of Gold Leaf High by @MTB
Love the way you blended different racial backgrounds in one story and how you give the reader an insight into the lives of more than just one character, something we hardly see in stories on the app.
Will recommend you work more on zooms. Got a lil messed up in a few scenes.
Thank you to @Misslea1 for this short review.
MissRuby's Review
My review of Gold Leaf High
I love the plot and I found no directing mistakes. However, I noticed several errors such as characters talking without doing animations, messed up zooms, and grammatical errors. I also think that the first episode wasn’t very interesting. I suggest making more happen so readers will be more intrigued to continue the story.
Thank you to @rubywrites for this short review.
Nessya's Review
Gold Leaf High
I liked the diversity and the several insights on the characters lives. I found refreshing scholarship students being proud of it and hanging out with others.
Cute intro, but there was a strange zoom in one of the characters, I believe it’s the one before Farrah. There were other zoom issues like when Beverly coughed and she bumped in Will.
Thank you to @Nessya for this short review.
rachel.epii's Review
Review of Gold Leaf High
I love the introductions to the character, particularly when the story has a flashback for a certain character. The only other thing I noticed is just one or two grammar errors and the panning and zooming simultaneously (it looks a bit awkward). Otherwise, it’s a great story overall, I enjoyed it (:
Thank you to @rachel.epii for this short review.
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Thank you for the reviews!
In case some of you remember the exact scenes where you noticed some erros I would love if you could dm me so I can check and fix those 
I’m interested for sure!
You can review my story
http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6311583539331072. 
Would you be interested in joining our group? I can def add you 
@remone ofc
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I’d love that
Our Short Reviews for the story Sentimental Heartache by @jessy.writes
JemU776's Review
My Review for Sentimental Heartache:
One thing I truly adored about your story is the music. I found you picked the right music selections in each scene as they set the mood for how the scene will play.
For example, in this scene, as Arianna cries, there is sad music playing behind her and it helps to reinforce how she is feeling. The text effects were also cool.
One thing I recommend to fix and go over is speechbubble placement. It was mostly nice from what I’ve read so far but there were some slip ups.
For example, in this scene, Alana is talking but the tail of the bubble comes from Josh’s mouth which makes it seem like he’s the person talking when actually he’s not, it’s her. So, the tail of the speechbubble should be coming from her direction as she is the one that is talking. Also when Alana and Arianna talk at the bus stop and Arianna gives her number, zoom in on them so the attention is on them (with your current zoom, we see lots of empty space with no activity except rain falling). Another thing! Three dots (…) instead of two (…)
Anyways, good job writer 
Thank you to @JemU776 for this short review.
MissRuby's Review
My review of Sentimental Heartache by @jessy.writes 
I really liked the narration and storyline. I absolutely love how you explained what the MC was feeling in such a beautiful and poetic way. The directing was pretty good, the only errors I found were some overlays appearing late.
Thank you to @rubywrites for this short review.
Nessya's Review
Sentimental Heartache
I usually don’t like music always playing but the way you change it really compliments the story and helps connect to Arianna’s feelings.
Not giving away too much, when we can understand that Arianna is going through something, is really smart, it leaves people curious, willing to understand the puzzle before them.
You really did a great job, we can feel Arianna’s struggles in things that we often take for granted.
Nice work with zooms. 
First scene speech bubbles on Arianna’s face.
Bus stop, when Alana’s boyfriend kisses her goodbye, he’s one or more layer above hers.
The same scene the speech bubbles are in Alana when is Arianna talking.
Bakery, guy’s speech bubbles are on Arianna.
The cotton candy machine shifted positions in the scene, it was fast but it happened.
Thank you to @Nessya for this short review.
rachel.epii's Review
Review of Sentimental Heartache
I really love how you’ve described Arianna’s feelings in most of the scenes, particularly when she bumped into her ex. The only thing I noticed was that there weren’t any overlays over background characters (so they were walking over obstacles). It’s a pretty great story so far!
Thank you to @rachel.epii for this short review.
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Awesome, I’ll add you in the group
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Thank you for the reviews everyone!! I’ll take these things into account and fix any mistakes 
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yay!
Update: This club is temporarily on hold, unfortunately, I can’t handle this on top of what I already need to get done and I get forget about this sometimes as it’s way down on my priority list. Thus, requests are closed for some time until I announce otherwise so please do not post your story below and/or ask to join, thank you. We will still be posting our reviews for the story on the wait-list tomorrow but after that, we will be on a long break. Thank you so much for understanding. Love, JemU776 
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@remone your review will be posted at approx 1 pm EST today 
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Ok thanks
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Our Short Reviews for the story Hannah Miler’s Mystery by @remone
Jessy.writes' Review
My review of Hannah Miler’s Mystery:
I wish that there was more context and it didn’t get straight to Hannah’s death. Spelling/grammar and spot directing can be fixed. For example, at the crime scene, characters are appearing on the screen. I liked the funeral scene a lot, but I wish I could’ve been more connected to Hannah before her death, it sort of just happened.
Thank you to @jessy.writes for this short review.
lowkeyFrosty's Review
I loved the story, but it could be honestly better. I feel like if you added more details this story would have a better chance of getting out there. The directing is mediocre and you have characters on and off-screen which I suggest having a proofreader checking that out for you. Hanna’s death seemed so sudden and if u added more context clues to help us understand Hanna as a person it would be better.
Thank you to @xetic for this short review.
Misslea1's Review
My review of Hannah Miller’s Mystery:
I love your plot because it’s very intriguing. I especially can’t wait to know the relationship between Hannah and Ser 
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What I recommend fixing is grammar, pay attention to spot directing and zooms.
Thank you to @Misslea1 for this short review.
Nessya's Review
Hannah Miler’s Mystery:
Nice start, I really believed that Hannah could escape when she ran and was able to unlock the door then she was caught.
I really liked the bus scene, it looked like it was moving, nice job!
Awesome job with the zooms in Ser’s appearance, I liked the part where we couldn’t see her face, it gave the right feeling.
At the start of the episode we have a day BG then changes abruptly to a night.
Also after running, the character changes to a type of walking that doesn’t match her urgency.
In the jungle, after she walks looking sad/worried she stays idle, which again doesn’t match what you are trying to portray.
Strange change of BG, instead of fainting on the trailler, it passes through the exterior of the abandoned house.
Some layer issues on the trailler crime scene, the caution tape is on top of the first policeman at the start, then the second officer appears then the third, so I believe you’re using @ instead of &, when you use the first, the action happens after the previous action is finished while the latter makes everything happen at the same time.
I believe Dara.Amarie has an explanation thread for this.
Sometimes when officer Jessa is talking the other officer’s mouth is still moving from the previous talking animation.
The overlays are not appearing on the intended position at the start of the scene it happened with the bus and with the coffin.
Thank you to @Nessya for this short review.
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OK thanku guys for the reviews
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