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Thanks so much for this! I really appreciate it! :heart:

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You’re welcome xx

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My story: © Tribe of Malapinchi
Author: Jannah Jackson
Genre: Thriller/Mystery/Horror/Fantasy/Adventure
Description: Toss into a land of the sun, magic, lies and dark secrets in Asia. Can you survive, solve the havoc and save everyone before it’s too late? FullCC
Episodes: 5/6
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5909308359180288
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Title : Take My Heart
Episode Author : Jiya
Genre : Romance
Style : Ink
Link : http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4602924031868928
Description : Shawn visits NY to get away from his childhood love. But what happens when he meets an ordinary girl? Will she help him unite with his love or show him what real love is?
Cover :
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Episodes : 1 (more to come)

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Here’s your review, @Sebule hope I was helpful x

Summary
  • Personally I wouldn’t click on the cover but the description sounds interesting.
  • The directing in the first scene is great!
  • “Don’t say hop before you jump” You might want to say “Don’t leap before you look.”
  • You might want to improve on your grammar, it doesn’t make that much sense. There are lot’s of proof reader’s who can read your story.
  • The story plot is really intriguing.
  • I really like Raven and Helena they are bad ass bitches.
  • When Raven talks to the audience I suggest you don’t make it INT. BLACK - DAY but maybe a scene when she is explaining all the rules to someone.
  • The overlays of Ravens cuts and bruises are also underneath Helena, you might want to change the layer.
  • I really like the story so far.
  • Is Myroslav a child?
  • Aww, :cry: he’s so sad.
    *It’s really hard to read the flashing text.
  • I can tell that your choices matter.
  • Cliffhangers are a great way to make people want to read on.
  • Overall, you just need a bit of improvement on your directing and maybe you might like a proof reader. Also I wouldn’t personally tap on the story because of the cover. Apart from that the plot is amazing and I really like the characters personality.
  • This story is a 7.5/10

Just wondering how many episodes you want me to review. xx

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Sound’s really interesting, can’t wait to read it.

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3 is fine. The max you wish to accept. If its 3 then 3. If 5 then 5. If 1 then 1🤗. Im cool with it.

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Ok thanks x

Thank you,
I struggle with english a lot :cry: :face_with_head_bandage:
Myroslav isn’t a child, he just had an accident… :smile: there’s flashback about him in the second chapter .
And I also want a new cover but I have no idea what should it look like ://
Btw would you like a reader want to continue reading it or not? :slight_smile:

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There are lots of people on episode forums who could proof read for you.

Awww, I feel so sorry for him, :cry:

I could make one for you xx

I’m already reading the 3rd chapter because I like it so much! :joy:

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Story name Vip Brother:Love is…
Authors name Megz_episode
Episodes 5
Instagram name megz_episode7997
How many episode you want me to review 4 are enough
Description A story about 16 celebrities who enter the house of Big Brother uder 24/7 surveillance for 2 months to win the prize of 500 000$, but before that they have to go through all challenges of Big Brother.
I would like you to promote my story.
Style LL
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Link http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4977128782561282
Hello I would love you to give my story a review. Have a nice reading :slight_smile::slight_smile:

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What do you mean by “promote” and btw you’re on the waiting list. xx

Thank you, I’m happy to hear that! :smile: :hushed: , if you don’t mind making me a cover I would really appreciate it! I have been thinking about it a lot but still I have no idea -_- and I don’t want just a random cover, but you already know what’s this story about so it will be great! :heart: :blush:

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Hey girl @Unicornlover346 <3
I think that’s a pretty sweet and selfless idea of you. It’s amazing how the community is willing to help each other.

So, I am currently adding another scene to one of my first chapters. :face_with_raised_eyebrow: However, after that, I will gladly also ask a review for my story, if that’s alright for you :smiling_face_with_three_hearts:
And if you want, I can also make a review of your story as well :slight_smile:

I am a reviewer for my group @epimaniacs at Instagram. So, just in case anyone wants to get another review opinion - you can just head to instagram then. :slight_smile:
So, @Unicornlover346 I will come back to you after I have finished reading your story <3 Please, just tell me if you want to get it on the thread or, if you would prefer to get it via PM.

Oh, and I am going to post my story details as soon as I have finished the extra scene :kissing_heart:

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Here’s your review, @Marshmallow_o hope I was helpful x

Review

Episode 1:

  • Instead of making the reader choose what the family looks like you could use a code to make them look like the MC when she’s customised.
  • I like how the choices matter.
  • The directing is great and i can tell that you put a lot of effort into your story.
  • I kind of didn’t get to say anything else because I was too busy reading your story :heart:

Episode 2:

  • I have noting to say, It’s great!

I don’t think I have to review it anymore, it’s amazing! I hope it get’s loads more reviews and it’s a really good first story. xx
This story is a 10/10

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Thank you so much! xx You can put it on the thread :heart:

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Thank you! :slightly_smiling_face: Hope you will like it!

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Here’s your review, @Maya6 hope I was helpful x

Review

Episode 1:

  • Normally covers that’s just a photo is a big turn off as they don’t look professional. I could help you with this but making you a cover, if you want you can PM me the details.
  • You don’t need to tell people that english is your 3rd language as you could get proof readers on the episode forums and they can see if you have any mistakes, just get straight to the story! :grinning:
  • The description sounds intriguing and the plot sounds like a really good and unique idea!
  • You might want to look at the directing a bit, when the MC is going into the customisation she slides in instead of walking, apart from that the directing is really good so far.
  • Aww, I feel so sorry for all the girls. :cry:
  • Some of the backgrounds are very blurry, you might want to use higher quality images.
  • I forgot to say more it was so interesting!

Episode 2:

  • You made me really hate the grandma (which is good btw).
  • It’s good that you gave a disclaimer about Jerusalem’s status now.

Episode 3:

  • This episode was great I didn’t get to say anything.

  • Overall you might just need a proof reader and someone to do you’re cover. The plot was great and I really felt sorry for the characters. I am a muslim and I found it interesting to see what it would be like in different countries.


  • First impression: 5/10 Directing: 8/10 The plot: 8.5/10 The characters: 9/10 Speech/grammar: 6/10

  • This story is 8/10

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