Unicorn's reviews (closed to catch up)

Thank you so much! xx You can put it on the thread :heart:

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Thank you! :slightly_smiling_face: Hope you will like it!

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Here’s your review, @Maya6 hope I was helpful x


Episode 1:

  • Normally covers that’s just a photo is a big turn off as they don’t look professional. I could help you with this but making you a cover, if you want you can PM me the details.
  • You don’t need to tell people that english is your 3rd language as you could get proof readers on the episode forums and they can see if you have any mistakes, just get straight to the story! :grinning:
  • The description sounds intriguing and the plot sounds like a really good and unique idea!
  • You might want to look at the directing a bit, when the MC is going into the customisation she slides in instead of walking, apart from that the directing is really good so far.
  • Aww, I feel so sorry for all the girls. :cry:
  • Some of the backgrounds are very blurry, you might want to use higher quality images.
  • I forgot to say more it was so interesting!

Episode 2:

  • You made me really hate the grandma (which is good btw).
  • It’s good that you gave a disclaimer about Jerusalem’s status now.

Episode 3:

  • This episode was great I didn’t get to say anything.

  • Overall you might just need a proof reader and someone to do you’re cover. The plot was great and I really felt sorry for the characters. I am a muslim and I found it interesting to see what it would be like in different countries.

  • First impression: 5/10 Directing: 8/10 The plot: 8.5/10 The characters: 9/10 Speech/grammar: 6/10

  • This story is 8/10

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thank you so much for taking the time to review my story it means so much!!! and you were helpful indeed! :heart::star_struck:


i do already have one in there, but the lip colors don’t always match with characters of darker skin tones so i give the reader to edit them if they need to :star_struck:

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I had the same problem but then I found a lip colour that would suit all skin tones. xx

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no way really?!?!
i don’t want to clog your thread, but do you mind me asking what it is?

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I chose dark new lipsticks that suit black skin and looked like lipstick for white skin. e.g the red garnet or maybe the blood orange xx

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Hey dear <3 @Unicornlover346
I finally found time to read your first chapter of your story.:kissing_heart:

First of all - I LOVED YOUR INTRO <3 the black man running made this whole thing really unique.

A few other details I have noticed and wanted to tell you (I hope you don’t mind since I always try to be very specific to help the authors improve her story :smile: )

  • Did you want the MC run to her mother thaaat fast or, did you maybe miss the &walks to spot XY in zone X in 5s command?

  • I liked the directing in front of the school and - your directing in general is good :slight_smile: I liked that you used background characters.

  • I have spotted speech bubble errors when MC and Derrick are talking to each other.
    Outside the classrom it should be “your place instead of you’re place” and also “clothes” instead of “cloths” when Alexa and MC are going to shop (Um… if cloths is a synonym for clothes; I am sorry. English isn’t my first language and I don’t know the synonym then :-))

  • When Alexa exits left, she exits way too big and the layering is behind the MC. Maybe you could try to use the spot directing to exit here, instead of the @exits left command?

  • When Alexa comes back, she is sliding instead of walking because she starts talking too early. (same when MC comes back after changing back in her normal clothes) The speech bubbles are also in a wrong place.

  • You wrote “Well I looks like you’re not getting a donut then” instead “Well, it looks like you’re not getting a donut then.”

  • Speech bubbles after the flash back about the mask are also placed wrong; same with speech bubbles when MC is talking to her father.

  • I liked the cliffhanger at the end of Episode 1.

  • I loved that you didn’t kept introducing every single part of the MC’s life since I am not a fan of that. I liked the beginning and also the flashbacks. It really keeps us hooked and curious to read more about the MC. Also, It’s great that you also use the point system. <3

I hope I could help you a bit :slight_smile: And feel free to tell me also about errors, you may notice while reading my story as well.
Especially since I have revamped my first 3 chapters, I would really appreciate if you could tell me about wrong speech bubbles or tell me if you noticed any grammar mistakes (since English isn’t my 1st language… I bought a program to check on everything, but though…)

Thanks in advance <3

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And here are my details as well :slight_smile:

My details:
My Story:
Author: May Laugh
Title: Trouble Twins
Instagram: maylaugh_episode
Genre: Adventure
Episodes : 8 (going on)
Style: Ink
Always standing up for each other through thick and thin, that is what these twins are all about. But can they really master every chaos together?
Link: [http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5334870588784640 ]

Small Cover:

Large COVER:

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Thank you so much xx This is really kind and helpful. x

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You are very welcome :slight_smile:
I hope a few others here are going to give your story a read as well… It also deserves attention!

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You’re honestly so kind xx

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I would love a review of my new story. Any and all feedback is welcome! :slight_smile:
I will also add your story to my favorites and give you feedback as well!
Here is the info:

Title: Dark Essence
Description: When the darkness inside threatens to break free & destroy everything you hold dear… Will you seek comfort in the ones you love or allow your Dark Essence to take over? (Lim CC)
Episodes: 3
Genre: Fantasy
Style: Limelight
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6025752143069184


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Here’s your review, @JannahJackson hope I was helpful x

  • The title sounds really unique and interesting.
  • I like the description, it’s detailed and intriguing.
  • The intro is really good and kind of mysterious but really creepy, also the directing is spot on.
  • No spelling errors so far.
  • This coding is good and I can tell you put a lot of effort into it.
  • I love the plot and diversity.
  • First impression: 9/10 Directing: 10/10 The characters: 9/10 Speech/grammar: 10/10
  • This story is a 10/10
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Thank youuuu!!! Oh what do you not feel quite right with the characters though? :hugs::grinning:

I just didn’t feel sorry for them or happy for them. xx But 9/10 is great.

oh lolll no worries. Im interested in your perspective hehe. You mean all of the characters?

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No just a few xx

I am sorry i just now saw that it is closed. I am not in a rush. you can do mine after u catch up i wish.But I have recently revamped. I would love some review about it.

  • Title: Black hearts Golden desires
  • Author: Madhu
  • Chapters: 6
  • Description: Nand , a sorcerer princess of Solataria has two beautiful loving sisters, her other two halves. But what will happen if it becomes the vice versa and an old enemy arises back for revenge? Will Nand be able to overcome it ? Or will she fail?

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