Hi, I read your story and here are some things I noted:
- When Lalit goes to leave the reception, instead of having him do the dust off animation, make him do the transition_sit_to_stand animation to make him stand up smoothly.
- When Lalit flashed back to his anniversary with Elena, he said they were dating for five years, but halfway through it, he said, “She’s the love of my life and I have been dating her for three years.”
- I, too, am Asian and there are a lot of superstitions and traditions I don’t care much for, so I can relate to him when he said that he hated certain traditions and ideologies, but I don’t think articulate is the right word to describe him in that sense.
- You’re doing a great job with making the mother unlikeable and an example of what a big part of our society is, people who refuse to be more open-minded and get rid of their prejudices, basically people who need to get their heads out of their bums. The dad too. He represents the people who somewhat want to change but are afraid of what everyone else is going to think/say.