Vanilla's stories reviews ✨ [IN HOLD]

I’m so so sorry for those who still on the waiting list but I have a lot of work lately and I don’t have time to read all of the stories :sweat:
But I will open it soon as I get some more free time and then I’ll and the waiting list :upside_down_face:
I’m sorry again and thank you :sparkles:

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Title: My Kalona
Author name: Ray Edwin (pen name)
Description: Naomi desperately tries to bond with her estranged father, but becomes the prisoner of a Native-American curse that threatens all. Will her choices lead to freedom or failure?
Episodes number: 8 published (expected length 15 chapters)
Notes: Episode length will depend on your choices through-out the game (gain or loss of characters, scene unlocks or locks, multiple paths etc…)
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4559018983227392
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Title: Adventurous: Project Humanity
Author name: Dreamer
Description: In a world without sadness, your father starts a little project. What happens when you take part in it? Will you find your place in a world with new possibilities, new feelings?
Episodes number: 3
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5815192505614336

Thanks!

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First thing first your story really unique and I enjoyed reading it (the two first characters :sweat_smile:)
But honestly, I think you shouldn’t talk about the main character and explain what she is doing, I mean that instead of saying she ran or she thought or cried or whatever you should let the character describe everything and not like a narrator, you should write i ran to my bad and cried into my pillow or I walked down the street or I was angry at her, not she was angry at her
You get what I’m saying?

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I get what you’re saying… You think the narration should be in the first person rather than the third person, right?

Yes :sweat_smile:

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That’s a great idea! Thank you! I think once im finished with chapter nine, I may go back and redo the narration… it does seem like it might make the MC more personal. I appreaciate the feedback on this.

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The Title: Dirty Little Secret
Author Name : Anongirl
Description : Briella Hart, a native Californian new girl in town, finds herself stuck in detention after crossing paths with hall monitor, Grayson Sanders. It’s time for payback!
Episodes : 5
Link : http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5833300720615424
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Story name Vip Brother:Love is…
Authors name Megz_episode
Episodes 5
Instagram name megz_episode7997
How many episode you want me to review 4 are enough
Description A story about 16 celebrities who enter the house of Big Brother uder 24/7 surveillance for 2 months to win the prize of 500 000$, but before that they have to go through all challenges of Big Brother.
I would like you to promote my story.
Style LL
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Link http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4977128782561280

  • Title Scars
  • Author name inxmyxeyes
  • Description The past created who Eve is right now. Life never goes easy on her. that’s why she became so ruthless to anyone she’s ever met.
  • Episodes number 3
  • Link CLICK HERE

I’m sorry but the link you gave me is wrong
I’m not allowed to get into the script editing part, you need to send the story link

Sorry. The link is now edited.

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Title: Adventurous: Valour
Author name: TheGreenNebula
Description: You got released from prison after your reign as a super-villain, what will happen when you’re given a scholarship to a mysterious university that’s swarming with heroes? CC, LGBT
Episodes Number: 3 (More Episodes Coming Soon)
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6085941904605184

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Wow your story is actually really good, I really enjoy reading it, the whole idea is great
I don’t have really have any Remarks :joy:
But you should update your CC temples, you can use those- Dara’s temples

And that’s it actually :sweat_smile::sweat_smile:

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Title: © Tribe of Malapinchi
Author name: Jannah Jackson
Description: Toss into a land of the sun, magic, lies and dark secrets in Asia. Can you survive, solve the havoc and save everyone before it’s too late? CharacterCustomization
Episodes: 5/ (6 or 7)
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5909308359180288
Genre: Thriller/Mystery/Horror/Fantasy/Adventure

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Thanks! I’ll have a look at it :slight_smile:

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@Captain_vanilla
I have recently revamped. I would love some review about it. I hope I am not bothering you. I really hope you can do it like the previous one. I have made some things clear and the episodes are longer that before.

  • Title: Black hearts Golden desires
  • Author: Madhu
  • Chapters: 6
  • Description: Nand , a sorcerer princess of Solataria has two beautiful loving sisters, her other two halves. But what will happen if it becomes the vice versa and an old enemy arises back for revenge? Will Nand be able to overcome it ? Or will she fail?
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•Title Rock Your Socks Off
•Author name Isaiah H
•Description Lies,Love, Lust, Gangs and Death! People may think the dancing industry is simple… But what happens when it can get you killed?
•Episodes number 6
•Link http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5450918717161472

My Cover :slightly_smiling_face:

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First of all, i really don’t think that the character should talk to the player cause the character is basically THE player
And I think you took that whole weirdo thing a little too far :sweat_smile:
I don’t mean to insult anybody, I’m so sorry if I did :sweat:
I just think that the plot is really good but you need to give the character personality that everyone is comfortable with since there are many different readers :blush:

Thanks for the advice. I understand that she acts “weird.” However, I want to create an unique character. I want her to be “different.”