Ok I know this is a late reply but I just finished reading this story and I’m ready to review:D
Characters personality: so far I love cara and asher’s personality, and I love how all 5 of them already have a relationship with each other you know what I mean? I also love how cute miles fletcher is
so 4/5 for characters personality
Dialogue: I liked the dialogue it wasn’t repetitive, I couldn’t spot any grammar mistakes. The dialogue did seem realistic to me compared to other assassin and spy stories so you did really great with that! 5/5
Directing: I loved your directing the overlays was really good for example: The ropes used the tie up the characters was a good use of an overlay. the shots that were shot at their neck really enhanced the story for me also cars and ashers little fight scene, I really appreciate the amount of overlays you spent in this story. Maybe you can try to add background characters next time? 4/5
Plot: For this one I’m going to give 3/5 for plot because of originality. Because I have read lots of stories about spies/gang leaders or criminals being captured to do a task all together it you have portrayed this in a very exciting way so that good (:!
A thing you need to improve on is maybe adding more background characters because the story kinda felt empty? If that makes sense?
Overall score: 16/20!