Victoria’s story review shop

[Toriblack]

Hello guys I’m in a good mood today so I’m going to do BRUTALLY HONEST STORY REVIEWS. I’ll only be reviewing the full first chapter so I can get through everyone. (:

The marks will be out of 20. I’ll be marking you on the:
Characters personality 0/5 (to see if they have a realistic interesting personality etc)

Dialogue 0/5

Directing 0/5

Plot 0/5

And I’ll be giving things to improve on your story to make it better.

If I really like your story I will add it to my recommendations and favourites!

Good luck (

**also to mention again my story reviews are very honest, if you struggle to take in constructive criticism don’t bother lol. **

[episode.lara]

Title: Ocean’s 5
Author: Lara P.
Genre: Action
Chapters: 3 out (more coming soon)
Style: Ink
Description: Five highly skilled and most dangerous people on Earth are brought together for the biggest heist ever seen. What can go wrong?
Instagram: @larapstories
Link: https://episode.app.link/mRmxbzLPYR

[Turtle_Cat]

I would love to!

Genre: Adventure/Fantasy/Comedy (If that makes sense)
Title: Save Me, Hero!
Author: Turtle Cat!
Plot/Summary: After powerless Hero moves from a town where everyone has superpowers, she gets kidnapped by a group of fugitives who are forcing her to join them. What will she do?
Style: Ink
This story has 4 episodes
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HERE’S THE LINK!

[Penny2]

Title: Sunny
Chapters: 3 (more coming sooooon)
Desc.: When Catrina moves from Cali to a small town, she meets Carter. How will she navigate annoying best friends, crazy older brothers, secret relationships, and high school?
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[MysteryMaker]

Story Title: LURKING IN THE SHADOWS
Story Author: Mystery Maker
Genre: Thriller
Episodes published: 3 (4th coming soon…)
Description: Carol is haunted by a series of terrifying dreams & cassettes.She strives to find her missing sister but is unaware that her six sense may led to unforeseeable consequences…

[AZN]

Title : My Freedom
Author : AZN
Style : INK
Genre : Romance
Description : He’s an actor and he’s successful. That doesn’t stop Grey from chasing a shy girl like Ophelia, while being engaged to her cousin.
Instagram : @azn.stories
Link : http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5828647379402752

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[Queen_BabyD]

My favorite!!!

[Queen_BabyD]

Title: Bite Me ReVamped
Author: Baby D
Instagram: bite_me_episode
Genre: Fantasy/Drama
Chapters: 17
Description:
Faith and Sarah has always been bffs till some new boys moved to town. Now they’re fighting over love,trust,and their secret lives. But will they put they’re jealousy aside to work together to fight new evil with they’re new powers and talents or will they tear each other apart over the charming,mysterious Adrian that’s hiding a secret of his own? Playing different people.

The Best Stories Are Worth Sharing: Bite Me (ReVamped)

[Toriblack]

Ok I know this is a late reply but I just finished reading this story and I’m ready to review:D

Characters personality: so far I love cara and asher’s personality, and I love how all 5 of them already have a relationship with each other you know what I mean? I also love how cute miles fletcher is so 4/5 for characters personality

Dialogue: I liked the dialogue it wasn’t repetitive, I couldn’t spot any grammar mistakes. The dialogue did seem realistic to me compared to other assassin and spy stories so you did really great with that! 5/5

Directing: I loved your directing the overlays was really good for example: The ropes used the tie up the characters was a good use of an overlay. the shots that were shot at their neck really enhanced the story for me also cars and ashers little fight scene, I really appreciate the amount of overlays you spent in this story. Maybe you can try to add background characters next time? 4/5

Plot: For this one I’m going to give 3/5 for plot because of originality. Because I have read lots of stories about spies/gang leaders or criminals being captured to do a task all together it you have portrayed this in a very exciting way so that good (:!

A thing you need to improve on is maybe adding more background characters because the story kinda felt empty? If that makes sense?

Overall score: 16/20!

[Toriblack]

Here’s your review:

Character personality: If I’m being honest, I feel me as the reader knows more about lighting bolt more the the main character hero’s personality which you should work on. - try giving hero more of a personality if I’m being honest she’s not boring but she really isn’t intresting because of the things she says. Anyway 3/5 for character personality!

Dialogue: The dialogue seems neutral and normal so there’s nothing really wrong with it. The character Hero is really bland when she’s speaking though so try to work on that. 4/5

Directing: the directing wasn’t bad but it wasn’t the best. There was a scene where hero looked bigger than her dad so please work on that. But other than that I think your directing is good!
3/5

Plot: for being original I will give you a 4/5 this is because your story is very original a teenage girl having a father that’s one of the strongest super hero’s in the world. I like the plot of your story you just haven’t conveyed it properly.

You need to improve on:
Making the background characters different don’t leave them to default characters as a reader it makes your story look lazy - like everyone has seen those default characters like 200 times.

Directing - by this I mean the size of hero

Overall score:14/20!

[Turtle_Cat]

Thank you so much! I’ll try to work on my errors.

[episode.lara]

Tysm I appreciate it

[Toriblack]

Characters personality: First of all I love Catrina’s personality and how cute she is - also I love how overprotective her brothers are other her especially Ethan which is really cute they all have interesting personalities.I love how the characters are diverse by the way, Carter is kinda creepy but that’s ok 5/5

Dialogue: there was nothing wrong with the dialogue, it seemed ok it wasn’t boring me or anything. And the grammar was on point.
4/5

Directing: The directing was Good I would say it’s just that when Evan was driving cat you could see their legs so fix that please (: .
4/5 for directing.

Plot: The plot really isn’t original but you showed it in an exciting way you know? There’s many stories like this that are not exciting. So your story stands out. 3/5

Overall score: 16/20

[ElleC]

Here’s my story I could always use some feedback (:
Instagram: ellec.writes
Title: Dying Love
Genre: Romance/Drama
Brief Description: I loved you the moment I laid eyes on you. …But as they say, all good things must come to an end. Art scenes inside.
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The Best Stories Are Worth Sharing: Dying Love

[AJ_PELZER]

Do you have a story we can review?

[Toriblack]

No ):, but do you?

[Toriblack]

Character personality: Caroline has a very curious personality which I like, there isn’t a lot of characters but so far your story is amazing! 4/5

Dialogue: Since it was a mystery genre there wasn’t a lot of dialogue but your story still kept me intrigued and not a lot of authors can achieve that.You kept suspense throughout the way which I love!! 4/5

Directing: Oh my gosh. the directing is amazing, the overlays for the shadows, the flashbacks, the texts everything was perfect! I can’t even do that much advanced directing there was no errors I saw so that really good! 5/5

Plot: I really love the plot it’s original I was curious throughout the whole episode of what was going to happen in the episode. I also really like the the mystery points! Sadly I didn’t have enough but that’s ok 5/5

I added your story to my favourites!

Overall score: 18/20

[MysteryMaker]

Thank you for the review and for reading. More characters may introduce in the second and upcoming episodes.

[JannahJackson]

Feel free to check mine out.

My story: Thriller: © Tribe of Malapinchi
Author: Jannah Jackson
Genre: Thriller/Mystery/Horror/Fantasy/Adventure
Story style: Secret Surprise
Description: Toss into a land of the sun, magic, lies and dark secrets in Asia. Can you make sense of the havoc you were tossed into and save everyone before it’s too late? CharacterCustomization
Episodes: 5/6
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5909308359180288

[R.es.Story]

I happy you can check my story…
This is my original story from me, the art scene in all chapter with a different style…^^

Author: R.es.story
Genre: Romantic
Style: Ink
Description: Jade has been humiliated by Max on her first day of college. She begins to grow hatred for him and decides to take revenge. What will happen to Jade?
Episodes: 11 (Ongoing)
Instagram: @r.es_story

LINK: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6073332409434112