well, thats a pretty unique story you have there.
Firstly, I know you are already aware of it but suicide is a really sensitive issue, so I hope you’ll handle the story in an extra careful way
Lets start off with the things i liked.
I liked that there’s customization, a lot of readers enjoy it.
The use of zooms and overlays makes it interesting to read.
The directing is really nice.
Another thing that i really really liked is the simple splashes, they were really nice and subtle.
However, I did feel that there were some things that could’ve been better.
Its only my opinion,but i felt that the story is paced really quickly, i mean the plot.
So many things happened in the first episode itself.
The best friend telling the MC about her feelings, telling her to die with her, and going on the road trip…
I felt like it would’ve been better if you’d let the plot develop itself at kind of a slow pace, like we don’t even know why the bff feels that way and its so bad that it makes her wanna die, with the MC.
But its the story’s plot so its not bad to let that happen in the first episode itself.
I also felt like the characters are wayyyy too chilled about it.
I also felt like the music choices weren’t exactly the best.
I mean they’re talking about dying and there’s kind of this playful entertaining music in the background?
Its what i felt tho
But anyway, your story was good and i enjoyed it.
Yeah, great job!