What do you think about my new story's description?

Sofia, a 19 year’s old girl who has a happy time in New York, well… that is her life before a new unknown danger virus escape and make her life turn upside down.

Tell me if I need any change in grammar, sentence and meaning okay? :33

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Maybe try:

Sofia, a 19 year old girl who had a happy life in New York, well… that was her life before a dangerous and unknown virus was released, which turned her life upside down.

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Okay thank u so muchhhh <3

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Moved to Share Feedback since this is about story ideas. Make sure to check out our Forum Tutorial for more info about creating topics, and feel free to PM me if you’ve got questions. :wink:

Maybe cut the “Which turned her life upside down part”, it makes it sound like a cliche romance.

Sofia, a 19-year-old girl who had a happy life in New York, well … that was her life before a deadly and unknown virus was released that turned her usual life become terrible.

Im fix a bit, what do you think?

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Yeah that sounds better.

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