LOL, I had to max out my screen brightness for that GoT episode. But yeah I think there’s a lack of background designs for night so writers often have no choice but to darken to simulate night. We can’t see anything though. LOL.
True. Someone should start an art topic where people just darken the skies so it makes the scene look night-ish! LOL Then we’d be able to see what’s going on! 
Maybe I’ll give it a shot 
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Note: Start bookmarking this thread to get some points off these views so you can start getting yr story better.
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I’ll say:
- Rushed relationships.
- No background story.
- Rushing the story itself.
- Since everyone mentioned grammar, yes grammar.
- Basic Directing: Which I am okay with when someone is starting there first story.
- I’d like to read stories with NO CHOCIES at all but its fine whether the story does or doesn’t have choices for me.
y are u so funny, omg. XD
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That thing when scenes linger too Long to show everyone’s reaction to something, especially if they all do similar animations like laughing and the sit-react-confused thing. It’s fine to have a somewhat quick pan to a crowd or something, but I just feel uncomfortable witnessing every person’s face. IDK why but I just do
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Same. Why not just zoom out so we can see everyone’s reaction at once?
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Exactly!
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Bump! I think this thread is helpful to new writers!
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This one is always so unfortunate because people like to go for darkness - aka just darkening the whole thing with black - instead of fixing it with cool color tones. They’d be a lot better off if they tried adjusting the coloring to have more blue instead of orange and just fixed some of the lighting issues. Looks like night time while your readers can still see the scene. Voila!
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GRAMMAR. 100%. If a story has bad grammar I cannot read it. Especially the ones where they literally just don’t use punctuation I can’t stand that. 
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There’s a lot, but one thing is when the author will randomly pop into the story or the beginning, saying stuff like:
AUTHOR (talk_unsure)
Hey guys… this is my first story and the pilot is really bad, so sorry! I SWEAR it gets better!
Or…
AUTHOR (talk_forward)
This is Shaniqua, you will be her. She is at a new school and has no friends. She is sad because her Mom is poor and her Dad is dead. Shaniqua likes music & art! She is not like other girls.
Like, don’t INTRODUCE me directly to the character and tell me about them, I want to learn more about them, their setting, the plot, the other characters by READING.
Basically, SHOW! DON’T TELL!
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This literally makes me exit the story immediately. It’s even worse when they add “The episodes are short until # Episode! They get longer!” —then fix the short episodes instead of telling people “you’re wasting your limited number of passes to read a sh*t story with short episodes !”
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It’s weird, but I cannot stand when authors start the first chapter with a spoiler from later in the story and do the whole “____ months before” thing. It makes my blood boil and I will immediately remove said story from my favorites and never read it.
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The first Episode needs to be the hook that reels in the reader, not chock-full of stale banter that gives me zero clue as to what I can expect from the plot
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Even better when the first episode intros every.single.character with “ThIs Is CaRlEe. ShE’s YoUr BeSt FrIeNd && ShE’s GaY && lOvEs CuPcAkEs!” … If a story starts with this, I leave.
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Sometimes I find best-friends in certain stories to be stereotypical.
The 3 Emotions of a stereotypical Episode BFF: Boy-Crazy, Therapist, and ‘Encouraging’ (cough cough, sometimes lowkey peer pressure cough cough.)
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Mafia stories (murderers shouldn’t be celebrated)
Bad boy stories (sick to death of this one)
Older men with younger women stories (been done to death)
Teacher and student relationships (pedophllia and illegal)
Abusive fathers (I wonder how readers real fathers would feel if they read their story?)
Gem stories that charge a fortune.
Why is no stepparent ever a loving person. Especially stepfathers.
When you don’t have gems for the dress, but the MC does that LONG parade with it that you can’t skip, knowing you can’t buy it anyway.
Writer who don’t recognise not everyone reads this on phone. Some use tablets and can’t see certain dialogue/the cover.
How you make a minor edit and episode forces the reader to read the whole chapter again and doesn’t give them the option of skipping it.
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Most users are on a phone, I totally understand the author writing their story for one main device to use. Plus, most of the time people forget about that feature.
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Most but not all. I’m not for one. There’s no warning saying this is only for phone users
Well most/some others don’t take it into consideration since their mind frame is readers reading their story on a phone.
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