What would YOU like to see in my mafia story?

Hey! So, I have posted a couple times about the mafia story I’m currently writitng. I have a good plan for it but I was wondering what would you guys want to see? For this particularly I’d prefer you read the story first, ( there’s only 4 episodes out rn lol not to much) so you’d have a better understanding. The reason this crossed my mind is because a lot of people are picky or love/hate things in stories or wish little details were added, tbh I do too sometimes lol, but what are the thoughts on this?

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Hey nessaa.writes,


What I would like to see:

  • Surprising storyline (something you don’t expect);
  • Advanced coding (so, you see the writer takes the time for his/her story);
  • Slow burning relationships;
  • Interactivity with the reader → get the reader ‘s*cked’ weird sentence but you get my point into the story;
  • LGBTQ+, No wait and No gem choices;

What I dislike in a story:

  • Too many black screens (get me on my nerves…);
  • Authors character takes half of the time of the storyline (I get it… You may have your own character → I have that too… But not in every episode half of the story time.;
  • Too many LI’s → I prefer 1;
  • One whole episode for only CC;
  • Mean girls and creepy alley guys popping out of nowhere → little too cliche;
  • Bad grammar and spelling → I am not a native English speaker, but I check my spelling during coding;
  • Wrong layering → like people walking through each other or kissing the wrong way;
  • Toxic relationships, violence against the LGBTQ+ community and/or racism;
  • Entering and exiting left or right → go from spot to spot… It’s irritating and weird if you see in a story a kid entering and exiting, while they grow if the leave or shrink into the spot.

If you’d like some more advice PM me over here or DM me at Instagram @angelwings_1983

Love A-W


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