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Hey guys. I have genuinely always been a picky person! I also have had OCD for a really long time in my life. Everytime I read a story on episode, in my journal I write what I would’ve wanted to see. Just post your story down below and I’ll read it gladly!

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Hi can you review my story?

It’s called Trapped.

The author name is meadowh

This is the cover:

And the link is:

Thanks so much for making this thread I really appreciate it :two_hearts:

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No problem! I will give you a review tmr! :heart:

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Thanks sm

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Can you read my story??

it’s called β€œthe unexpected”

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Hi @QueenMilii! I would love it if you reviewed my story with @Loversdelight! :hugs:

Story Title: Soccer Moms: Blast to the Future
Author Name: Winter05 with Episode Royalty
Customization?: Limited
Style: INK
Genre: Drama
Episodes: 6 [COMPLETE]
Story Description: All it takes is one shot to change your whole life. Win or lose, nothing will ever be the same.
Instagram Names: @winter05.episode with @penroyalty
Story Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6395210318086144

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Feel free to leave me fanmail! I hope you enjoy it!

~ Winter :snowflake:

Hey, @QueenMilii! Thank you for creating this thread. I’d love some feedback on my story. Here are my story details:

Title: Silhouettes
Author: aprilish
Genre: Fantasy/Romance
Style: Ink
Blurb: Arion’s ready to risk it all to make her dreams come true. Leslie sees him every day, yet fails to recognize who he is. Watch them fall in love…without ever meeting each other.
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6116658762874880
My Instagram: @aprilish.episode

Thank you so much! Looking forward to hearing your feedback! :two_hearts:

I’d really appreciate if you could read my story (still working on it)

Title: Dreams and Nightmares
Author: Dreamer
Genre: Romance
Style: Ink
Summary: Scarlet had a rough past and it looks like it’s not getting better after she was bought by some mysterious guy. Will she ever turn her life from a nightmare to a dream?
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5452320906543104 1

Hey. I’d like to get a review!
Story: No changes after a year…
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6385627538259968
Don’t read the third episode. It’s not ready.

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Hey! I really would love to get a review from you.
Story: All The Boys
Author: Daxa Rock
Genre: Drama/ Romance/ Comedy
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4970429717544960

Tittle: Search for love.
Author Name: Sigma.fr
Intagram: Sigma.fr.writes
Story Description :Your life turns upside down when you try to escape from a toxic situation! Can you find the love you are looking for trying to escape?
Genre: Drama
Link : http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5548786201264128 1
Cover :

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Author: Dr.Smile

Thanks for creating this thread! I`d love to do get review!
Story title: Let the demon inside
Author: Nierido
Genre: Supernatural romance
Description: You have to move back to Dimwood. What will you find there? Love, death or supernatural friends?
Number of episodes:5
Story style: Limelight
Link:http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4876381520789504
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can’t wait to start reading these!

Thank you! I hope you enjoy it. :blush:

Oh, if you have OCD you’ll probably like my current story. It’s about being mentally ill- it’s called Over Before You Know It, and it’s about two best friends who go on a road trip to the Grand Canyon for a suicide pact, you have to choose if you will jump or not. You can read it here: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6584190301765632

Tell me what you think.

OOOH thank you! I will start reading it as soon as I can!

Great, keep me posted!

Trapped Story Review:
There should be more pauses in the story

The word β€œprivilege” is spelled wrong

Character should be on idle while the other is talking so their animation doesn’t continue.
Ex:
@LEXI starts idle_happy

RIO (talk_exhausted)
Something, Something.
(This just makes it more professional)

After the Gala it goes to screen black Narrator starts talking about Ryan wasn’t anywhere then straight after starts talking about summer. There should at least be one pause the (code: @pause for a beat)

The limo animation needs a little updating, I recommend reviewing it for yourself.

When you say the date September 2017, 7: 17 I think rather than time, the actual date of the month would be more important.

When you get messages you should code something like this.
@RIO starts something with phone
Narrator
4 New Messages

    Narrator (DAD)

And so on…

@pause for a beat

      NARRATOR (MOM)

Behave and stuff.

It would be better as,
East wing, fourth floor

A pause after, β€œfinally some rest.”

For ten minutes later (School cafe) Lexi should be doing something else besides continuing the animation of texting rio

Pause after sure for going to mall.

When Lexi says that’s my crush she should just refer to Ryan

Ryan is short

When she air kisses rio there should be a pause after the animation so it can be completed.

I actually really like how the story is and I might continue reading it. The story is just too rushed because it doesn’t seem like there any pauses really. Hope this helped Meadow!

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Hey Hannah! So I decided only to read the first episode of every story on the thread.

And yes you’re right it is pretty short. Since it is so short I’d think of a better way of customizing the character. Usually in stories you would customize the character with a black screen if it was at the start of the story. I think you should make it at the start of the story so that the little glimpse you have in the forest will at least have the customized character.

Your description has 2 spelling errors, difference and experience. It would make it more professional if it was spelled correctly.

I is capital.

You ask for the name twice, so you might want to get that fixed.

I hope this helped!