Which description is more interesting?

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I love you, I want you, and I must have you. I will stop at nothing to make sure you’re mine… even if it means killing anyone who comes in between us. But, do you love me?

You thought going from rich to poor is the worst thing that could happen to you. Think again… a hot murderer is in town, and he’s looking for you.

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if you have suggestions, don’t hesitate to share :slight_smile:

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@gisellec do u know the Netflix show “YOU”? Number 1 sounds like it :smirk::joy:

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I actually watched that!! I didn’t even make that connection omg :joy::joy::joy:

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i think option 1 is more interesting but option 1 makes me think it’s more of a romance with a male mc while option 2 makes me think it’s a thriller

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Hmm so do you think I should change the “I” in 1 to “He” :face_with_monocle::face_with_monocle: because the genre is supposed to be mystery and the reader doesn’t know who the guy is until later on

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like this?

He loves you, he wants you, and he must have you. He will stop at nothing to make sure you’re his… even if it means killing anyone who comes in his way. But, do you love him?

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well it’s your choice because both sound interesting to me. It’s just the one with “you” sounds scarier to me because it’s like we’re inside the guys mind hearing his thoughts

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I agree too, I just don’t want to bring peoples hopes down if they think the MC is a male yanno :sweat_smile:

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It depends on what you want to draw the reader’s attention to. If romance is more prominent in your story, go with number 1.

If you want to focus on the thriller part, you might want to use number 2 but I can say that number 1 is quite unique. Number 2 kind of descriptions are always found on episode.

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I switched the “I”s in number one to “He”’s, does it still have the same effect or USB it less interesting now? I’m kind of going for a mix of romance, thriller, and mystery :wink:

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I think that sounds even better!

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Great!! Thank you so much!!

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No problem. :smiley:

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If you ever made a story like number 1 just remember to PM me so i can read it!

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It’s already out!! Called Blades of Desire by Giselle C. :smiling_face_with_three_hearts::sparkling_heart:

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Oh okay! Thanks for telling, I may look into it later! :blush:

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