Wondering how to fix

I am new to episode creation and am wondering how to get this choice code/script to be like there texting back and forth on the phone.
can someone help me fix this?

NARRATOR
One Unread message from Mr Huang.

Know What. I don't care, I'm coming over?

choice “You are what?” {
NARRATOR
Meet me at your door in five minutes.

    MARGARET
How do you know where I live?

goto read_messages

} “What!?” {
NARRATOR
You are not dumb. So stop acting like it. I’m almost at your house.

    MARGARET
YOU ARE A JACKASS!

goto read_messages

} “Aren’t you suppose to be at that gala thing?” {
NARRATOR
I left, I need you tonight.

    MARGARET
Needs me?

goto read_messages

} “Ignore all” {
NARRATOR
Answer your phone.

}

What exactly is the error?

I’d suggest using NARR (CHARACTERNAME) (eg NARR (MARGRET)), so it shows up in a box rather than a speech bubble, unless you want her to be talking.

And do the same for Mr Hunag.

2 Grammatical Changes.

Keep the punctuation for your choices consistent. Choice 4: Ignore all

Suggestions

NARRATOR
One Unread message from Mr Huang.
NARR (Mr Hunag)
Know what? I don’t care, I’m coming over?

choice
“You are what?” {
NARR (Mr Hunag)
Meet me at your door in five minutes.
NARR (MARGRET)
How do you know where I live?
goto read_messages
}

“What!?” {
NARR (Mr Hunag)
You are not dumb. So stop acting like it. I’m almost at your house.
NARR (MARGRET)
YOU ARE A JACKASS!
goto read_messages
}

“Aren’t you suppose to be at that gala thing?” {
NARR (Mr Hunag)
I left, I need you tonight.

NARR (MARGRET)
Need me?
goto read_messages
}

“Ignore all” {
NARR (Mr Hunag)
Answer your phone.
}

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There isn’t an error
i just was wondering how to make the conversation in narrative form so it looks like there interactive texting.
while looking at the syntax examples guide book i didn’t see NARR and i didnt know how to do it.
I will try your method. thank you LaurelleE27

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