Would anyone be willing to review the first few eps of my story?

Hey, I’m Maris and I’m currently writing my first story and it’s been in the works for about 6 months now. I’ve only written 6 chapters though because it takes me anywhere between 2-4 weeks to complete one chapter. (I know crazy right?) I’ve been thinking about whether all the work that I put into this story is worth it or not and I want another opinion or multiple. I would like y’all to be honest about my narration., dialogue, plot, characters, and directing. You can tell me if I should add more or reel it in a bit. I would appreciate if you could read all 6 chapters before giving me feedback and if there are any punctuation or grammar mistakes I would love to be notified about those too.

Story title- Forbidden Remedies
Discription- A broken girl and a jaded boy. When one mistake brings their two worlds together will they be able to heal each other?
Link to the story- http://episodeinteractive.com/r/s/6149960510406656

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Thank you!

Hi I will read your story and them PM you

Thank youu!

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