Would you read this story? is there anything i should change?

Hey,

Tysm!! I already have 3 stories… :wink:
Read them…
The first two stories I wrote: ‘Little Star’ and ‘The door is open…’ are in both styles INK and LL…
They are completed already…
My last story ‘The search of Thomas f*ing White’ is only in LL.
(Because in my opinion the characters are not as funny or pretty if they all should be in INK… :wink: )
I still am continuing writing that story (I want to make 50 episodes…)
And I also started writing another story independent from those three stories: ‘Bounded minds’.
Still not published and not finished…
Feel free to read them… You find them under my episode profile: AngelWings.

Love A-W