I have this scene here. and it is kinda important but. it just sounds horrible. and I can’t make it work out please help
JANE
Hey are you okay
WADE
Do I look okay
JANE
Okay can I be frank
WADE
Sure.
JANE
What is up with that woman
JANE
I have never in life seen someone act like a scene
JANE
Why are marring that woman? I did not even talk to her and I already hate her
WADE
Trust me if I could get out of that marriage I would
JANE
What do you mean it? it's not like you are forced to marry her
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JANE
You are? why
WADE
A favour for a friend
JANE
That is some big favour you are doing for Don
WADE
How you know it was him
JANE
Lucky guess
JANE
But why
WADE
Good question. and something I should not talk about
WADE
So excuse me for changing the subject
WADE
But are you gonna go on date with Don
JANE
What, no. he has not even asked me on one
JANE
Why do think that has he said something
WADE
Yes. will you say yes to a date with
JANE
I dont know. Both he and I just got out of messy relationship
WADE
I honestly thought a girl like you would be happy to land a guy like Don
JANE
What do you mean a girl like me
WADE
A girl who doesn't have any money
WADE
But it is nice to know it isn't the money you are after
JANE
(no I am after information. which properly is worse )
hi, overall its good but the bits in bold are what i think should be changed a little, ofc you dom’t have to change it but heres my opinion anyway
some bits werent super clear but otherwise I think it sounds good, i’m intrested on what will happen next :))
EDOT: Idk why but some bits are in bold when they’re not meant to