Writing a new song

Hey! So I’m in the middle of writing a song, my father is producing it (he has already produced about three songs), let me know if you would lesten to it or is there is anything I should change!
It is about my love story, this boy broke me, but I’m back up again!
It’s called Leaving U
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Verse 1:

You left me now you’re trying to put me down
Bitten off more than you can chew.
Well you left me alone in the dark but guess what? Baby
You left me and now I’m leaving u.

Verse 2:

I’m sick of all the lies we told
What happened to I love you too
Why are you trying to act like it’s okay?
You left me and now I’m leaving you.

Pre- chorus:
Why can’t
We act
Like we
Still care
Why do
You
Want me to

Chorus:
Think about it day and night
Not put up with it, no fight
Act like everythings all right?
Think that we are doing fine,
Stop it cause your wasting time
You and me, oh, it’s a crime.

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I have more, tell me what you think, bump this post and I’ll send the rest!

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Let us know when it’s out, I will definitely listen to it :star_struck:

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Gurlie I literally started singing this song and the lyrics seems sooooo amazing!! Send the rest please lol!!

Happy birthday gurlll @epi4em :smiling_face_with_three_hearts: :sparkles:

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Thank youuuu :heartpulse::heartpulse:

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You are most welcome :smiling_face: :heart_hands:

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Hey @lilydiamond!

I love that you’re putting your experience into this song. I do this sometimes to work through hard times, what about you?

I like the lyrics and rhymes, they’re something many people can relate to.

I wish you all the best :heart::pray:

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Thank you :blush:

Thanks!!!

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Tysmmm

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It sounds great!! :blob_hearts:

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Thank you!

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Oh my goddd congratttttsss!! I don’t have any critiques, but I do have a tip! When songwriting, think of the who, what, when and where! Paint a portrait! The song is great tho!! :smiley:

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Thank you so much for your advice!!

I would listen to it

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Thank you!!!

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