I am looking for proof-read

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i am looking for a person who can give me feedback about my story

Chasing Dream (episodeinteractive.com)

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Hey :white_heart: I think we already shared our feedbacks in the previous post , you should fix those errors first then ask for proofreading
Good luck :white_heart::white_heart:

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what’s errors

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in story

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can you send me picture of error to me

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please

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@Av3ry pointed those errors on the previous post :white_heart:

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in chapter i just add sence belle parents find out college admission

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make chapter 1 more interesting

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and belle run off of the house

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It’s not about adding scenes to make it “more interesting” The scenes overall looks so weird you need practice how to direct and you didn’t even creat characters or outfits and the episode is too short

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i forget about out oufits

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i think need fits car scene

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i think need mother in my story

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for belle

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ok, i will fit error in chapter

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1

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ok, i fix error in the chapter 1