Scene Fixes Help (LL)

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can someone fix this scene for me

this is the issue

Directing:
(1) Kitchen scene
Amelia and the manager are way too big compared to the furniture.

and this is the script

INT. INDUSTRIAL KITCHEN - DAY
#@AMELIA changes into Amelia_Waitress1
#@AMELIA changes hair into Long Feathered
music off
@zoom reset
sound int_kitchen_industrial
@transition fade in black
@MANAGER spot 1.622 245 -112 in zone 2 AND MANAGER faces left
@AMELIA enters from left to spot 1.568 119 -126
@AMELIA is think_rubchin
@pause for a beat
@pan to zone 2 AND MANAGER is read_phone_neutral_loop
@pause for a beat
@pan to zone 1
@zoom on 16 366 to 122% in 1
@pause for a beat
@AMELIA starts cough
@pause for a beat
@pause for a beat
@cut to zone 2
@zoom on 640 484 to 120% in 0
@MANAGER starts talk_startled_neutral
@pause for a beat
@pause for a beat
@speechbubble is 166 211 to 100% with tail_top_right
MANAGER (talk_startled_neutral)
Oh, sorry! I didn’t see you there.
@MANAGER starts think_rubchin
@pause for a beat
@pause for a beat
@speechbubble is 166 211 to 100% with tail_top_right
MANAGER (talk_think_neutral)
Wait.
@pause for a beat
@speechbubble is 166 211 to 100% with tail_top_right
MANAGER (talk_shrug_neutral)
May I ask: who are you?
@cut to zone 1
@zoom on 16 366 to 122% in 0
@speechbubble is 166 211 to 100% with tail_top_left
AMELIA (talk_smile_happy_loop)
I’m…
@cut to zone 2
@zoom on 640 484 to 120% in 0
@speechbubble is 166 211 to 100% with tail_top_right
MANAGER (talk_excited_happy)
Oh, you must be Amelia.
The new waitress.
@speechbubble is 166 211 to 100% with tail_top_right
MANAGER (talk_armscrossed_neutral_loop)
I was wondering when you were going to show up.
@cut to zone 1
@zoom on 16 366 to 122% in 0
@AMELIA starts idle_awkward_scratch_loop
@pause for a beat
@speechbubble is 166 211 to 100% with tail_top_left
AMELIA (talk_awkward_loop)
Yeah, my class ended late. I’m sorry.
@cut to zone 2
@zoom on 640 484 to 120% in 0
@speechbubble is 166 211 to 100% with tail_top_right
MANAGER (talk_shrug_neutral)
No need to worry.
@speechbubble is 166 211 to 100% with tail_top_right
MANAGER (talk_think_neutral)
Your timing is perfect.
@AMELIA walks to spot 1.568 83 -120
@zoom on 640 484 to 101% in 1
@speechbubble is 166 211 to 100% with tail_top_left
AMELIA (talk_shrug_neutral)
Why is that?
@speechbubble is 166 211 to 100% with tail_top_right
MANAGER (talk_agree_happy)
The boss is here with his fiancée.
&zoom on 640 484 to 147% in 0
@speechbubble is 166 211 to 100% with tail_top_right
MANAGER (talk_smile_happy_loop)
So, if you could serve them, that would be great.
@speechbubble is 166 211 to 100% with tail_top_right
MANAGER (talk_smile_happy_loop)
It would also give him a chance to see your working skills.
&AMELIA is talk_repulsed
@zoom on 320 417 to 147% in 2
@pause for a beat
@speechbubble is 166 211 to 100% with tail_top_left
AMELIA (talk_deny_neutral)
Are you sure you want me to serve them? On my first day?
@zoom on 640 484 to 147% in 0
@speechbubble is 166 211 to 100% with tail_top_right
MANAGER (talk_gossip)
Of course! I’m sure you will do just fine.
sound phone_ring
@zoom on 640 484 to 101% in 1
@MANAGER is read_phone_neutral_loop
@speechbubble is 166 211 to 100% with tail_top_right
MANAGER (talk_smile_happy_loop)
Sorry, dear, I have to take this.
@speechbubble is 166 211 to 100% with tail_top_right
MANAGER (talk_smile_happy_loop)
If you need anything, my office is just outside the kitchen.
@speechbubble is 166 211 to 100% with tail_top_left
AMELIA (talk_deny_neutral)
But-
@MANAGER walks to spot 1.622 432 -95 AND MANAGER faces right AND MANAGER is walk_talk_phone_neutral_loop
@pause for a beat
@zoom on 320 402 to 132% in 2
@speechbubble is 166 211 to 100% with tail_top_left
AMELIA (idle_awkward_uneasy_loop)
(It’s my first day, and I am already serving the boss.)
@AMELIA starts eyeroll_subtle
AMELIA
(No pressure at all.)
@pause for a beat
@AMELIA walks to spot 1.568 351 -120 AND AMELIA is walk_exhausted_loop
@pause for a beat
@transition fade out black

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I fixed it up as best I could! Copy & Paste to your script and then Preview the story to see if that’s what you wanted. I used a female character for Amelia and a Male Character for the Manager, so I scaled the Manager to be a little taller than Amelia. You can just scale accordingly to how you want :slight_smile:

INT. INDUSTRIAL KITCHEN - DAY
#@AMELIA changes into Amelia_Waitress1
#@AMELIA changes hair into Long Feathered
music off
@zoom reset
sound int_kitchen_industrial
@transition fade in black
@MANAGER spot 1.299 225 -30 in zone 2 AND MANAGER faces left
&AMELIA spot 1.252 -52 -28 in zone 1
@AMELIA walks to spot 1.252 156 -28 in zone 1
@AMELIA is think_rubchin
@pause for a beat
@pan to zone 2 AND MANAGER is read_phone_neutral_loop
@pause for a beat
@pan to zone 1
@zoom on 16 366 to 122% in 1
@pause for a beat
@AMELIA starts cough
@pause for a beat
@pause for a beat
@cut to zone 2
@zoom on 640 484 to 120% in 0
@MANAGER starts talk_startled_neutral
@pause for a beat
@pause for a beat
@speechbubble is 146 166 to 85% with tail_top_right
MANAGER (talk_startled_neutral)
Oh, sorry! I didn’t see you there.
@MANAGER starts think_rubchin
@pause for a beat
@pause for a beat
@speechbubble is 146 166 to 85% with tail_top_right
MANAGER (talk_think_neutral)
Wait.
@pause for a beat
@speechbubble is 146 166 to 85% with tail_top_right
MANAGER (talk_shrug_neutral)
May I ask: who are you?
@cut to zone 1
@zoom on 16 366 to 122% in 0
@speechbubble is 204 198 to 84% with tail_top_left
AMELIA (talk_smile_happy_loop)
I’m…
@cut to zone 2
@zoom on 640 484 to 120% in 0
@speechbubble is 146 166 to 85% with tail_top_right
MANAGER (talk_excited_happy)
Oh, you must be Amelia.
The new waitress.
@speechbubble is 146 166 to 85% with tail_top_right
MANAGER (talk_armscrossed_neutral_loop)
I was wondering when you were going to show up.
@cut to zone 1
@zoom on 16 366 to 122% in 0
@AMELIA starts idle_awkward_scratch_loop
@pause for a beat
@speechbubble is 204 198 to 84% with tail_top_left
AMELIA (talk_awkward_loop)
Yeah, my class ended late. I’m sorry.
@cut to zone 2
@zoom on 640 484 to 120% in 0
@speechbubble is 146 166 to 85% with tail_top_right
MANAGER (talk_shrug_neutral)
No need to worry.
@speechbubble is 146 166 to 85% with tail_top_right
MANAGER (talk_think_neutral)
Your timing is perfect.
@AMELIA walks to spot 1.252 93 -39 in zone 2
@zoom on 640 484 to 101% in 1
@speechbubble is 150 190 to 85% with tail_top_left
AMELIA (talk_shrug_neutral)
Why is that?
@speechbubble is 174 216 to 85% with tail_top_right
MANAGER (talk_agree_happy)
The boss is here with his fiancée.
&zoom on 640 484 to 147% in 0
@speechbubble is 138 143 to 85% with tail_top_right
MANAGER (talk_smile_happy_loop)
So, if you could serve them, that would be great.
@speechbubble is 138 143 to 85% with tail_top_right
MANAGER (talk_smile_happy_loop)
It would also give him a chance to see your working skills.
&AMELIA is talk_repulsed
@zoom on 320 417 to 147% in 2
@pause for a beat
@speechbubble is 172 119 to 85% with tail_top_left
AMELIA (talk_deny_neutral)
Are you sure you want me to serve them? On my first day?
@zoom on 640 484 to 147% in 0
@speechbubble is 138 143 to 85% with tail_top_right
MANAGER (talk_gossip)
Of course! I’m sure you will do just fine.
sound phone_ring
@zoom on 640 484 to 101% in 1
@MANAGER is read_phone_neutral_loop
@speechbubble is 169 213 to 85% with tail_top_right
MANAGER (talk_smile_happy_loop)
Sorry, dear, I have to take this.
@speechbubble is 146 166 to 85% with tail_top_right
MANAGER (talk_smile_happy_loop)
If you need anything, my office is just outside the kitchen.
@speechbubble is 150 190 to 85% with tail_top_left
AMELIA (talk_deny_neutral)
But-
@MANAGER walks to spot 1.299 86 -30 in zone 3 AND MANAGER faces right AND MANAGER is walk_talk_phone_neutral_loop
@pause for a beat
@zoom on 320 402 to 132% in 2
@speechbubble is 150 190 to 85% with tail_top_left
AMELIA (idle_awkward_uneasy_loop)
(It’s my first day, and I am already serving the boss.)
@AMELIA starts eyeroll_subtle
AMELIA
(No pressure at all.)
@pause for a beat
@AMELIA walks to spot 1.252 86 -39 in zone 3 AND AMELIA is walk_exhausted_loop
@pause for a beat
@transition fade out black
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looks perfect thank you <3

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You’re welcome! Also, I realized I changed every ‘you’ in the script to AMELIA :rofl: I’m sorry about that! I fixed it, but just in case you see it and you’re like “What happened?”

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