Story Review: Please help!

whirlwinder · July 23, 2019, 5:01pm

Hi everyone,
I started writing my very first story in December 2018, Silent Killer, after reading many inspiring stories by Episode authors on the app for more than two years. Since then, I have only found the time to publish 4 episodes, and am currently experiencing a bit of writer’s block. I would really appreciate if someone took the time to read these 4 chapters and give me an honest review of these chapters. Thanks a lot everyone!
-Rohit
Title: Silent Killer
Genre: Action
Description: Iris Garcia, a gang leader, is out to avenge her father’s death. What will happen when she meets another gang leader? Follow Iris through corruption, betrayal, conflict, and love.
Cover: SmallCoverSilentKiller
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6387823813197824

Danielle318 · July 23, 2019, 5:02pm

I will read it this afternoon in a few hours!

whirlwinder · July 23, 2019, 5:04pm

Thank you so much for your help!!! Please let me know how it is!

Emilou · July 23, 2019, 7:24pm

@whirlwinder Do you want us to private message you our feedback or leave it here in the thread?

AMagic · July 23, 2019, 7:27pm

Emilou · July 23, 2019, 7:29pm

@AMagic That seems so helpful! I will definitely use that once I finish a few episodes!

AMagic · July 23, 2019, 7:33pm

Thanks!!

whirlwinder · July 23, 2019, 7:44pm

Sent mine in, how was it @AMagic it’s called Silent Killer (sent it on your original thread)

whirlwinder · July 23, 2019, 7:45pm

Anywhere is fine! It’s up to you, haha.
Thanks for checking in though! How was it?

AMagic · July 23, 2019, 7:45pm

Oh yeah, I forgot it was you. I emailed you like maybe 5 mins ago.

whirlwinder · July 23, 2019, 7:46pm

Yay thanks I’ll check my email

whirlwinder · July 24, 2019, 1:51am

How was it? @Danielle318 I hope it went well!

Danielle318 · July 24, 2019, 2:12am

I hope it will. I am eating dinner at a restaurant currently. So I am gonna read it when I get home, I haven’t been home all day, so no chance to read it.

whirlwinder · July 24, 2019, 2:16am

Don’t worry, take your time. You are from the West Coast too??

Danielle318 · July 24, 2019, 4:13am

I am Pacific. US

Danielle318 · July 24, 2019, 4:15am

Yep.

Danielle318 · July 24, 2019, 4:37am

I dont wanna say on a public thread…
You story is good, you have direcring issues.
You have Iris walk to screen center in zone 1, but if you say no, she goes to screen right.

whirlwinder · July 24, 2019, 4:37am

Sorry lol. I sound like a stalker. Lemme delete these messages.
Do you have an insta?

whirlwinder · July 24, 2019, 4:38am

Do you actually think my story is good?? haha that’s good to hear

Danielle318 · July 24, 2019, 4:40am

Yep.
Insta: @episode.danielle_318
Yes. I like it.