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what do you guys think about this summary/description for my story? please be honest and let me know if i should change anything!

Jasmin is a sweet high school student who prefers the company of books to the chaos of socializing. Jamin’s world turns upside down when she encounters Roman, whose demeanor is anything but sweet. To label him as ruthless would be an understatement.

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I like it but because of the word count the ending looks unfinished?
If this is a romance plot I think the description is good if it’s a plot other than romance it may need some adjusting.

I usually like to make descriptions with questions in them.

  • by reading the story the questions get answered.
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great idea thank you so much!

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I love it!

Though the second time you mention Jasmin’s name, I would replace it with “Her”

In my opinion I’m a bit against having questions in descriptions unless they’re really good :sweat_smile: I usually see questions at the end of descs like, “What will happen when they meet?” “What happens when LI is not so nice to MC?”
Imo it’s so overused, it really isn’t an inviting question.

I like your ending statement-- I love ending statements in descriptions, makes it more secretive/or makes me really want to click it.

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thank you os much for your feedback! much appreciated <3

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what are your thoughts on this summary/story description?

Once hurt from the world, Jasmin, a high school student with a gentle, friendly soul, prefers the company of books to the chaos of socialising. Roman is a coldhearted devil, consumed by darkness. While Jasmin is sweet, Roman’s demeanour is anything but. To label him as ruthless would be an understatement. What will happen when Jamin’s world turns upside down, when she uncovers the dark secrets the dark secrets of the parallel universe.

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I think it is good but if ur making this description for episode does need to be smaller

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ok, i’ll try to shorten it a bit. thank you!

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I agree so much lmao , they remind me of episode’s original stories

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Would you read a story with this description? If not, what do you think I should change?

please give me honest, constructive feedback!

What will happen when Jamin’s world turns upside down when she uncovers the dark secrets of the universe, which involve devilishly handsome Roman.

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Honestly? You have a pretty promising description already! It just needs a few tweaks, and it’d be perfect. : )

How about...

“A kind student who prefers books to people. A ruthless rebel with a rough facade. The two cross paths, and their worlds turn on their heads.” (Not sure how I feel about my tweaks, but feel free to use this description if you like it! No credit needed.)

As @/catdelrey pointed out, questions in story descriptions are pretty common, and can feel less interesting to potential readers. If you can, try to avoid throwing in a bunch of questions and calling it a day. Of course, if your description reads best with a question, please do include it. Just keep in mind that there’s no one-size-fits-all, and that you should do what works for you and your story!

I personally quite like how your description ends with a statement, as it feels confident and intriguing.

I also feel it’s important to mention that the cap for story descriptions on Episode is 180 characters. (Honestly not the best amount for writing descriptions, but that’s a chat for another day.) Your current description does exceed that amount, so you might want to try rewording your description to fit it better.

Sometimes referring to existing examples can be helpful, so I've quoted a few below that stick out to me! Perhaps they might give you some ideas?
  • “Gingerbread houses, jingling bells, flushed cheeks, & illicit affairs.” Imprisoned in a loveless marriage, Darcy found her second chance in a pair of ice grey eyes" | ‘Illicit Affairs’ by apdvstory
  • “Welcome to the most luxurious 5-stars hotel ever! Your package includes sexy lovers, fancy parties, scandalous drama, and deadly secrets… Ready for a killer summer?” | ‘Summer Fever’ by Lucas
  • “A selfish wish to stop living two lives leaves a passionate ballerina cursed. Redemption? To help find a cocky and apathetic violinist, the love of life.” | ‘To The Sound Of Rain’ by apdvstory
  • “Amber’s life was a series of unplanned choices. Ruby, however was sore, unruly, and a troublemaker. She hated Ruby for many reasons, but the first was that she loved her.” | ‘My Lesbian bad Girl’ by Viola Musaraj

I hope my reply is able to help you! Happy writing! : D

(Edited to correct a mistake.)

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omgg thank you so much for the suggestions and your help!

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